Talk:K2-18b/GA1
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Reviewer: Amitchell125 (talk · contribs) 19:35, 1 April 2023 (UTC)
Happy to review this article.
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GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
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Review comments for the lead section and part of the main article
[edit]Lead section / infobox
[edit]- Link mass.
- In the infobox, link red dwarf; K2-18; exoplanet.
- the same amount of starlight – the Earth’s water is in liquid form due to radiation from the sun (Solar irradiance), not starlight.
- its atmosphere – ‘the atmosphere of K2-18b’ sounds better.
1 Star
[edit]- Link K2-18 at the beginning of the section; parsecs; ly; mass; luminosity.
- Move the link to Sun where it first occurs in the text.
- It is colder – ‘The star is colder’ is clearer.
- moderately active; tend to create false signals – need clarification.
- analysis of planets difficult should be followed by a comma.
2 Physical properties
[edit]- Link density; core (Planetary core.
- passing in front of it during its orbit – this is true for all orbiting objects. It needs to made clear that the object appears to pass in front of the star, as viewed from Earth.
- There is a second planet around K2-18, named K2-18c – this has been stated already in the text.
- through tides – it’s not clear what this is supposed to mean.
- envelope – ‘atmosphere’?
- a Neptune-like composition – needs to be explained.
- against their own heat's; If an ocean exist – need copy editing.
- Comma after between Earth and Neptune. Ditto with a thick envelope.
- What are well-separated planetary populations?
- core-ocean exchanges – a brief explanation in brackets, or a relevant link, would help readers to understand this technical-sounding term.
- This distinction – what distinction is being referred to here?
- "radius valley" – should be in italics, not quotation marks.
- Internal heating may increase temperatures follows It probably has little internal heat left, which sounds contradictory.
- impact the surface temperature – 'affect the surface temperature'?
Not GA
[edit]I'm stopping there. This article has potential, but at present I'm afraid it needs a deal of work before the GA standard is reached. There are issues with the quality of the prose, the use of jargon and technical terms, and the links. I do not think the article can pass unless everything that needs to be sorted is listed—which is something I am not prepared to do. Amitchell125 (talk) 18:57, 5 April 2023 (UTC)