Talk:K'/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 21:29, 30 October 2015 (UTC)

I'll have this to you soon JAGUAR  21:29, 30 October 2015 (UTC)

Initial comments

• "(formerly known as "SNK")" - no need for quotations here
• " in The King of Fighters '99 released in 1999" - comma between "'99" and "released"
• "He stars as the reluctant hero in the NESTS story arc" - what does NESTS stand for? The lead doesn't clarify this for readers
• "was mainly due to popular response for the character" - I'd change this to popular reception
• "Nevertheless, the character designer Falcoon said K' was one of his favorites original King of Fighters characters" - remove the plural on "favorites". Also, would it be worth changing Falcoon to his real name?
• "They also jokingly mentioned that the reason for his hair being bushier than need" - "bushier than need"? Is it meant to be bushier than needed?
• "advised advanced players to use K' as he commented once the player has learnt well how to control him" - the latter half of the sentence doesn't make sense. I'd change this to advised advanced players to use K' as he stated that once the player had learned how to control him
• "For The King of Fighters XIII, K'‍ '​s" - there are two apostrophes here - oh wait, I just realised this is correct, bearing in mind his name ends with an apostrophe
• "design was worked with the concept of his cool appearance" - 'cool' isn't encyclopaedic. If it's taken from a quote, then I'd put "cool" in quotes
• "Developers like the result" - liked
• "such as one in which he puts his sunglasses" - puts on
• "His gameplay mechanics were worked so that gamers who used to use him would not find him weird" - this is not encyclopaedic! Needs rephrasing
• "He stands 183cm (6'0") and his weight is that of 65kg (143 lbs)" - should be He stands 183cm (6'0") tall and weighs 65kg (143 lbs)
• "The participants often critize him for being antisocial" - criticize

On hold

I'm a little worried about some unencyclopaedic material I found above, but other than that the article appears solid and well researched. Once all of the above are addressed, I'll take another look and see how if it meets the GA criteria. Good work on the article so far JAGUAR  21:50, 30 October 2015 (UTC)

Thanks for the comments. I already tried to change the article based on them.Tintor2 (talk) 22:27, 30 October 2015 (UTC)

Thanks, Tintor! I've gone through the changed and am satisfied that this meets the GA criteria. Well done! JAGUAR  22:35, 30 October 2015 (UTC)

Thanks Jaguar.Tintor2 (talk) 22:44, 30 October 2015 (UTC)