Talk:Justus Smith Stearns/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 10:08, 6 March 2021 (UTC)

Comments

• J.S. Stearns --> J. S. Stearns

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:43, 6 March 2021 (UTC)

• As "lumber baron" redirects to "business magnate", it's worth linking lumber in the lead to tell us specifically what he was into.

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:51, 6 March 2021 (UTC)

• "He was involved" was also. Or ditch "other".

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:51, 6 March 2021 (UTC)

• "Stearns, as a ..." sentence has lumber three times!

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:51, 6 March 2021 (UTC)

• "lumber baron" is linked twice in the lead.

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:01, 6 March 2021 (UTC)

• Pine King in the lead and "Pine King" in the body.

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:01, 6 March 2021 (UTC)

• "He was involved in..." you already said what he was involved in in the first para of the lead.

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:01, 6 March 2021 (UTC)

• You link Michigan in the lead but none of the other states.

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:09, 6 March 2021 (UTC)

• "of a boating" in a boating accident.

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:09, 6 March 2021 (UTC)

• "at around" at not needed for me.

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:09, 6 March 2021 (UTC)

• "who had this tragic death at such an early age" unnecessary commentary.

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:09, 6 March 2021 (UTC)

• No need to link common words like "teen"

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:13, 6 March 2021 (UTC)

• "Miss Paulina Lyon" is "Miss" needed?

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:13, 6 March 2021 (UTC)

• "Pauline's" - Paulina?

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:13, 6 March 2021 (UTC)

• Convert the miles for the people reading this who live in a metric world.

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:36, 6 March 2021 (UTC)

• Setback is just a single word.

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:36, 6 March 2021 (UTC)

• Several locations are overlinked: "Ludington, Michigan", ", Stearns, Kentucky", "Bagdad, Florida", "Odanah, Wisconsin", "Mason County, Michigan" etc.

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:36, 6 March 2021 (UTC)

• " it had 30 men " employed.

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:36, 6 March 2021 (UTC)

• Link board foot.

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:36, 6 March 2021 (UTC)

• "Pere Marquette Railroad." seems to be called Railway.

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:36, 6 March 2021 (UTC)

• "one of the top businessmen" in what sense?

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:40, 6 March 2021 (UTC)

• " Yamacraw and Oz." what are these?

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:53, 6 March 2021 (UTC)

• "bankruptcy.[6][3]" order.

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:53, 6 March 2021 (UTC)

• "banking interests in implementing new banking" repetitive.

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:07, 6 March 2021 (UTC)

• "Stearns built in 1902 the first all electric..." -> "In 1902, Stearns built the first all-electric...":

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:07, 6 March 2021 (UTC)

• Refs, no spaced hyphens, per MOS:DASH.

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:07, 6 March 2021 (UTC)

• Check date formats are consistent in refs.

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:47, 6 March 2021 (UTC)

• Page ranges also need dash not hyphen.

Not Done - don't know how to do. Can you help? Thanks. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:47, 6 March 2021 (UTC)

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 21:00, 6 March 2021 (UTC)

• Ref 10 should be "pages" not "page".

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:47, 6 March 2021 (UTC)

• ISBNs should be consistently formatted.

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:47, 6 March 2021 (UTC)

• His death and death date etc appear to be missing from the article prose.

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:47, 6 March 2021 (UTC)

That's it for now, on hold. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 11:13, 6 March 2021 (UTC)

•  Working Thanks for review. I'll get working on the issues.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:24, 6 March 2021 (UTC)

• @The Rambling Man: All issues addressed. One not done. Can you take another look. Thanks.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:47, 6 March 2021 (UTC)

FWIW - It so happens that Professor Nagle authored this book in 2015 based on the Wikipedia article I created in 2010 on Justus Smith Stearns. He told me he is working on another history book about Eber Brock Ward that he is basing off the Wikipedia article I have 91% authorship, that I did a 10 times expansion on 29 October 2010. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 21:40, 6 March 2021 (UTC)

Happy with the article now so promoting to GA, good work. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 12:00, 7 March 2021 (UTC)