Talk:Julius Morgan/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Ealdgyth (talk · contribs) 00:32, 4 February 2022 (UTC)[reply]

I'll review this shortly. -- Ealdgyth (talk) 00:32, 4 February 2022 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Images:
- I suggest that you add to the caption for the electric chair image that the person pictured is Morgan.
- Do we have an approximate date for the infobox image? If so, can we add it to the caption?
Background:
- Do we need all six citations for the second paragraph? If they are supporting just parts of the paragraph, perhaps move them to the parts they support?
- Maybe move the bit about the Assembly making the electric chair the method of execution to the end of the first paragraph of the Trial section, as it just jars here in the background section
- Do we know if he was employed? Education? It sounds like his father was deceased, but obviously his mother was still alive when he was executed - that would need mentioning in the background, I'd think
Trial:
- Where was Sheriff Reichman sheriff of?
Execution:
- "people attended to see him" is very clunky to me - suggest rewording to "people gathered to see him transported."?
- I suggest removing the quote from him as a blockquote - just quote it in the running text.
- We mention the visit by the governor, but did the governor explicitly deny clemency or did the governor just not act on the petition?
- "Since his execution there have been one hundred-thirty prisoners executed using the electric chair; eighty-five of them were black." This seems a bit ORish to me. I can see the 133 number possibly being due weight, but unless there are sources that tie the 85 black number specifically to Morgan, it's probably UNDUE here. I get the point, but we need to rely on some secondary sources that make the point and make it in regards to Morgan, to have it in the article (It would NOT be OR/UNDUE in the "List of people executed in Tennessee" article or an article on the death penalty in general in TN, just for an article about one prisoner executed, it needs to tie to that prisoner.)
I randomly googled three phrases and only turned up Wikipedia mirrors. Earwig's tool shows no sign of copyright violation.
I did a few copyedits, please make sure they are correct and do not change the meaning.

I've put the article on hold for seven days to allow folks to address the issues I've brought up. Feel free to contact me on my talk page, or here with any concerns, and let me know one of those places when the issues have been addressed. If I may suggest that you strike out, check mark, or otherwise mark the items I've detailed, that will make it possible for me to see what's been addressed, and you can keep track of what's been done and what still needs to be worked on. Ealdgyth (talk) 13:32, 6 February 2022 (UTC)[reply]

@Ealdgyth: Thank you much for the opportunity to work on the deficiencies. Also thank you for the time you spent reviewing the article. I believe that I have made all of the changes which you have suggested. The article is better for it. Bruxton (talk) 04:14, 9 February 2022 (UTC)[reply]

These look good, passing it now! Ealdgyth (talk) 12:48, 9 February 2022 (UTC)[reply]