Talk:Julia Stephen/GA1

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Reviewer: Coffee (talk · contribs) 20:40, 17 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Rate	Attribute	Review Comment
1. Well-written:
	1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.
	1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.	Work section contents should not be after her death. Not sure where that rule comes from. All my WP biographies, GA and FA are written this way. See for instance William T. Stearn Michael Goodyear (talk) 00:16, 18 February 2018 (UTC)[reply] Parenthetically I have frequently complained that the Biography project does not provide any guidance for standardizing biography articles. It was for this reason that I wrote such a document as guidance for biographies of botanists in the Plant project and wrote a model FA (see above). --Michael Goodyear (talk) 05:14, 18 February 2018 (UTC)[reply] Its an interesting point. I took a look at your most recent GA biography, Fannie Lou Hamer. I certainly don't have a problem with doing it that way, but it is by no means the norm, for instance both her famous daughters, Vanessa Bell and Virginia Woolf have death before works, but her second husband's has death at the end. . --Michael Goodyear (talk) 19:24, 18 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]
2. Verifiable with no original research:
	2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.
	2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).	Several sentences/claims need direct inline citations throughout the article. Not sure about this. Given that there are literally hundreds of inline citations, can you point to what you consider unsupported claims? Michael Goodyear (talk) 00:43, 18 February 2018 (UTC)[reply] There are indeed, just not for every line (some may well be listed in citations in the paragraphs but the direct claims are not). Here's the list: That is the correct assumption --Michael Goodyear (talk) 18:54, 19 February 2018 (UTC)[reply] Sarah Prinsep, and her sisters, were adept at making great men feel at ease, and they frequented her house. There one might find Disraeli, Carlyle, Tennyson and Rossetti partaking of tea and croquet, while the painter George Frederic Watts (1817–1904) lived and worked there, as did for a while Edward Burne-Jones (1833–1898). added --Michael Goodyear (talk) 18:54, 19 February 2018 (UTC)[reply] Their third child, Gerald Duckworth, was born six weeks after his father's premature death in September 1870, at the age of 37, from an undiagnosed internal abscess. He was said to be reaching for a fig for her, while they were visiting Julia's sister (now Adeline Vaughan) at Upton Castle, New Milford, Pembrokeshire, when it ruptured. Within twenty four hours, he was dead. - This entire claim is sourced to blogspot, which is not a WP:RS. added (parenthetically Kimberley Eve is a respected writer on Victoriana, and contributor to academic publications!) Michael Goodyear (talk) 19:06, 19 February 2018 (UTC)[reply] but kept herself going for the sake of her children. added --Michael Goodyear (talk) 19:20, 19 February 2018 (UTC)[reply] Julia had become aware of Leslie Stephen through both his writings on agnosticism, and through a mutual friend, Anne Thackeray (Anny, 1837–1919), the writer and daughter of William Makepeace Thackeray. added --Michael Goodyear (talk) 19:34, 19 February 2018 (UTC)[reply] On January 5, 1878, Julia Duckworth and Leslie Stephen became engaged, and on March 26 they were married at Kensington Church, although she spent much of the period in between nursing her uncle, Henry Prinsep, at Watts' house in Freshwater, till he died on February 11. - If this is being sourced to the following line's citation (a book), it needs at the very least a page number (as does the following line). added --Michael Goodyear (talk) 19:34, 19 February 2018 (UTC)[reply] Her work was both practical advice and also advocacy. that was never intended to be a sourced statement. It is a bridging sentence between discussing her nursing text and discussing her social activism. I rewrote it to make that clearer. Incidentally while I can see the original "not only" might be perceived as laudatory and hence not NPOV, it was actually objectively descriptive — as in not only but also. Quentin Bell considers her importance measured not so much in herself as in her influence on others. added - sometimes after multiple edits, phrases become separated from their original citation, so the above were all retrieved by going back to when they were first introduced. --Michael Goodyear (talk) 20:48, 19 February 2018 (UTC)[reply] Done These all need page numbers as well: [Welcome to the world of eBooks, which makes exact pagination difficult --Michael Goodyear (talk) 22:02, 19 February 2018 (UTC)][reply] Citation 8 Mary Bennett's book is difficult for most readers to get hold of. In all cases I have provided an alternative easily accessible source that provides similar information on the the Jackson family. Also most of the information I extracted from the book is contained in the accessible review by Vogeler I appended to the book in the bibliography. --Michael Goodyear (talk) 22:02, 19 February 2018 (UTC)][reply] Citation 20 [Stephen: That is a reference to the book, not to text within the book --Michael Goodyear (talk) 22:38, 19 February 2018 (UTC)][reply] Citation 24 [Cameron: ditto --Michael Goodyear (talk) 22:40, 19 February 2018 (UTC)][reply] Citation 57 [Wilson: Pagelink provided --Michael Goodyear (talk) 23:04, 19 February 2018 (UTC)][reply] Citation 58 [Nadel: Pagelink provided --Michael Goodyear (talk) 02:18, 20 February 2018 (UTC)][reply] Citation 67 [Bicknell: added --Michael Goodyear (talk) 14:01, 20 February 2018 (UTC)][reply] Citation 84 [Stephens: — reference to book, not as source --Michael Goodyear (talk) 14:04, 20 February 2018 (UTC)][reply] Citation 95 [Woolf: — reference to book, not as source --Michael Goodyear (talk) 14:04, 20 February 2018 (UTC)][reply] Citation 100 [Woolf: — reference to book, not as source --Michael Goodyear (talk) 14:04, 20 February 2018 (UTC)][reply] Citation 101 [Woolf: — reference to book, not as source --Michael Goodyear (talk) 14:04, 20 February 2018 (UTC)][reply] Citation 104 [Ender: Pagelink provided --Michael Goodyear (talk) 14:28, 20 February 2018 (UTC)][reply] Citation 113 [Stephen: — reference to book, not as source --Michael Goodyear (talk) 16:59, 20 February 2018 (UTC)][reply] Citation 129 [DeSalvo: — reference to book, not as source --Michael Goodyear (talk) 16:59, 20 February 2018 (UTC)][reply] Citation 141 [Light: — reference to entire book, not specific source --Michael Goodyear (talk) 17:04, 20 February 2018 (UTC)][reply] Citation 142 [Dunn: pagelink provided --Michael Goodyear (talk) 17:33, 20 February 2018 (UTC)][reply] Citation 153 [Cameron: added --Michael Goodyear (talk) 17:40, 20 February 2018 (UTC)][reply] Citation 191 [Humm: pagelink provided --Michael Goodyear (talk) 17:48, 20 February 2018 (UTC)][reply] Citation 198 [Lowe: reference to entire book, not specific source --Michael Goodyear (talk) 17:50, 20 February 2018 (UTC)][reply] Citation 200 [Burstyn: reference to entire book, not specific source --Michael Goodyear (talk) 18:02, 20 February 2018 (UTC)][reply] Citation 201 [Annan: added --Michael Goodyear (talk) 18:54, 20 February 2018 (UTC)][reply] Citation 206 [Rosenman: substituted cited in --Michael Goodyear (talk) 19:46, 20 February 2018 (UTC)][reply] Citation 208 [Hirsch: pagelink provided --Michael Goodyear (talk) 19:59, 20 February 2018 (UTC)][reply] Done
	2c. it contains no original research.	Section 1.3: '"The marriage was a happy one..." seems like a synthesis issue at the very least. We have no way of determining the "happiness" of anyone ever, unless a psychologist or otherwise is stating it. Except that that is the opinion given by biographers Michael Goodyear (talk) 00:45, 18 February 2018 (UTC)[reply] Do you have a source that states that you could point me to? — Coffee // have a ☕️ // beans // 20:21, 18 February 2018 (UTC)[reply] added (similar issue to 2b)
	2d. it contains no copyright violations or plagiarism.
3. Broad in its coverage:
	3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.
	3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).	A bit too much emphasis (WP:UNDUE) on her family versus her herself. The problems in writing a biography about someone like this is that what we know about her is largely through the eyes of family members, as for instance Quentin Bell points out, her significance lies in the interactions with those family members. Michael Goodyear (talk) 00:50, 18 February 2018 (UTC)[reply] Seems reasonable. — Coffee // have a ☕️ // beans // 20:21, 18 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]
	4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.	Section 1.3: "Striking, is Vanessa Bell's 1892 portrait of her sister and parents in the Library at Talland House..." doesn't seem entirely neutral in the description Not my word, but one of the comments in the literature. The photograph had iconic status in the family as the inline citation notes. OK - rephrased --Michael Goodyear (talk) 04:23, 18 February 2018 (UTC)[reply] "As the youngest daughter, and last to marry, Julia was her mother's favourite daughter, in part due to her constant care of her mother who had many needs, and little time for maternal affection." - not inline cited properly, and if not so done, definitely a neutrality issue Additional inline provided --Michael Goodyear (talk) 04:30, 18 February 2018 (UTC)[reply] "Julia dealt with her husband's depressions and his need for attention, which created resentment in her children, boosted his self-confidence, nursed her parents in their final illness, and had many commitments outside the home that would eventually wear her down." - same as before Additional inline provided --Michael Goodyear (talk) 04:44, 18 February 2018 (UTC)[reply] Section 3: "She has been described as an austerely beautiful muse of the Pre-Raphaelites, and her physical image comes down to us through countless paintings and photographs." - seems like there's a bit too much emphasis on her beauty... tone that down for NPOV purposes (throughout the article) But the whole point is that that is what she is known for - described as the most beautiful woman in England, and her portraits sold for the highest prices then known. Again, not my words but a concensus of biographers. In this particular case the phrasing is from the inline citation provided (New Yorker) --Michael Goodyear (talk) 04:50, 18 February 2018 (UTC)[reply] Section 2.2: "Her work was not only practical but she was also an advocate..." tone here is not fitting to NPOV But again, that is descriptive and accurate and neutral, and from the sources cited. To be precise she (1) wrote a practical guide to nursing, and (2) was a social advocate for the poor and sick and was recognized for this after her death, and examples are provided - rephrased. --Michael Goodyear (talk) 04:59, 18 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]
	5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
	6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content.
	6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.	Seems like we could reduce the amount used, and use a commons portal link. Theoretically one could, and that is always an option. I have been a constent critic of the overuse of images, and often remove them. In this case, her image is central to the discussion. Each image has been carefully chosen to accompany and illustrate the adjacent text. I note that another editor and project founder recently wrote in the Women in Red Project that the article was "scrumptious" , which I took to mean well illustrated. --Michael Goodyear (talk) 05:04, 18 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]
	Overall. .	Awaiting 2b page number issues to be finished, then this will be good to go. — Coffee // have a ☕️ // beans // 22:03, 19 February 2018 (UTC)[reply] Article is now good to go! Congratulations! — Coffee // have a ☕️ // beans // 08:50, 21 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]