Talk:Julia Domna/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Iazyges (talk · contribs) 22:26, 30 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Will start soon. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 22:26, 30 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Criteria

GA Criteria

GA Criteria:

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1.a Y

1.b Y
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2.a Y

2.b Y

2.c Y

2.d Y
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3.a Y

3.b Y
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4.a Y
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5.a Y
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6.a Y

6.b Y

No DAB links Y
No dead links Y
No missing citations Y

Prose Suggestions

Please note that all of these are suggestions, and can be implemented or ignored at your discretion.

Suggest reorganizing sections into:
1. Family
1.1 Mariage

2. Life
2.1 Civil war

2.2 Power and influence

2.3 Transition of power.

2.4 Death

3.1 Legacy

4.1 Ancestry.
Julia Domna (AD 160–217) was a Roman empress of Syrian origins, the second wife of Septimius Severus (reigned 193–211). suggest:
Julia Domna (AD 160–217) was a Roman empress through her marriage to Emperor Septimius Severus (reigned 193–211).
After the deaths of both Caracalla and Julia Domna in 217, her older sister Julia Maesa successfully contended for political power. suggest either removing this, or writing a full paragraph on how Julia Maesa helped Elagabalus become emperor in the body. Would also suggest mentioning her death in lead.
many contenders rushed for the throne suggest:
many contenders fought for the throne
An elder senator, Pertinax, was appointed by the praetorian guard emperor of Rome. suggest:
Pertinax, an elder senator, was appointed emperor of Rome by the praetorian guard.
By offering Clodius Albinus, a powerful governor of Britannia, the rank of Caesar, Severus could focus on his eastern rival to the throne, Pescennius Niger, whom he defeated at the Battle of Issus in 194. suggest:
Severus pacified Clodius Albinus, a powerful governor of Britannia who was a contender for the throne, the rank of Caesar in exchange for renouncing his claim on the throne. This allowed Severus to focus on his eastern threat, Pescennius Niger, whom he defeated at the Battle of Issus in 194. (side note, I'm not sure where eastern came from, given that Niger was in Spain/Britannia.
honorary titles were granted to Julia Domna reminiscent of titles given to Faustina the Younger, suggest:
honorary titles were granted to Julia Domna similar to those given to Faustina the Younger, the wife of Emperor Marcus Aurelius (reigned 161–180).
@Векочел: That is all my suggestions, passing now. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 17:12, 23 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]