Talk:Judy (dog)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sagaciousphil (talk · contribs) 15:49, 27 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I've had a very brief skim through the article and did a couple of very minor copy edits. I'll look forward to doing an in depth review over the next couple of days. SagaciousPhil - Chat 15:49, 27 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks! This one has been a long time coming - I finally realised that I really should finish this article off before expanding either Treo (dog) or Antis (dog) from other book sources. Miyagawa (talk) 16:31, 27 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Some initial comments:

Lead

Would it be possible to expand this? At around 120 words it feels a bit short for an article of about 2,860 words.

Lead greatly expanded! :) Miyagawa (talk) 11:21, 29 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Info box

I'm on pretty unsteady ground here but can I just get clarification about the use of the flag icon, please? WP:MOSFLAG says to avoid the use of flag icons in info boxes but it does seem to give an exception for some military articles - is that why it's included?

It says Judy is from the UK yet she was born in China?

I've dropped the nationality (and the flag) from the infobox. Miyagawa (talk) 10:55, 29 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Military career

In the 3rd/4th sentence of the first paragraph: "... sleep on, and trained which areas she could not enter. One of these were the areas inhabited by the Chinese cooks, who disliked her." Could this be re-worded as it feels a bit clumsy to me, especially "trained which areas" and the repetition of 'areas' again in the next sentence.

I've overhauled that bit and changed around the sentence before and after too. Miyagawa (talk) 10:55, 29 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Do we know the sex of the ship's dog on the Ladybird? Or is s/he referred to as 'it' because this isn't known?

It was male - rectified. Miyagawa (talk) 10:55, 29 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]

More later - it's a really enjoyable read and hopefully I'm not coming across as nit-picking! SagaciousPhil - Chat 08:46, 28 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Post war and awards

At the end of the penultimate paragraph it reads "... which included a plaque which told of her life story."; could the repetition of 'which' be avoided?

Changed the second instance to "that". Miyagawa (talk) 10:55, 29 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Those are all the queries I have. Images are fine - all PD, captioned and relevant to the article. Although it's not a GA requirement alt captions would be helpful; refs are appropriately used, reliable and in a consistent style; no sign of copy vio problems - I've read through all the online sources; comprehensive coverage in a neutral well written manner without any original research; and the article is stable.

Just the minor points I've raised above to have a look at, please. A truly fascinating and intriguing story - proving a dog can indeed be "a man's best friend". SagaciousPhil - Chat 10:20, 29 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for addressing everything so quickly! I feel this is ready to pass. SagaciousPhil - Chat 12:26, 29 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]