Talk:Josephine Rector

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"I would suggest trying to find more information in order to create a Contents box with different titles such as personal life, awards or anything that could enrich the article along with the filmography that you already provided. Also, you could start by dividing the first paragraph into some sections and separate her early life from her career, so instead of looking like an essay it would fit an wikipedia article form more. "copied from a student reviewer E clark e100 (talk) 11:51, 16 March 2016 (UTC) e_clark_e100[reply]

Test: Peer Review — Preceding unsigned comment added by E clark e100 (talk • contribs) 19:12, 16 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"Peer Review" Your article is fairly good, but your wording could be better for some things, including the paragraph about her career. You should also remove the Indiana from her birth and death date and instead write that in the body of your paragraphs. I'd include one of those side boxes with the birth and death locations as well. Also, for her name, you should put Josephine Rector (nee Pickel). Other than that your article is very well researched. Nic.eperry (talk) 21:35, 16 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Peer Review

Hey! Love the details you found about Rector and the number of films in her filmography. However there were a couple things I noticed you could improve on.

It seems a little weird to have Indiana in the dates next to her name at the beginning.

The information in the second paragraph in her intro should maybe be reworked into the body of the article as it gets very specific. For a short article like this one, it makes more sense to have a short and precise into.

In the section "Early Life" the phrase "She had no problem with Western culture since she was used to riding horses, and outdoor activities.[4]" doesn't really make sense. Is there an implied problem with Western culture? You later explain the influence on her career in film, so perhaps just explain the skills she learned early in life. The sentence "In the 1890s, Josephine used to follow her father, a miner, over the Chilkoot Pass to retrieve some gold in the waters of the Yukon.[4]" can maybe be reworked something like this: In the 1890s, Josephine's father worked as a miner panning for gold over the Chilkoot pass in the Yukon.

For you "Career" section: what job did she start doing for Essanay and where was the office before it moved?

You can say "she met" instead of "she later met" since your article is organized chronologically anyways.

You mention her sons, although you don't mention her being married or creating a family?

Who is the company that went with Anderson and when were they in San Francisco? There is a weird grouping of sentences and times in her life in the first paragraph of career that are quite confusing.

Your last paragraph gives a very specific date and says "they," who is this signifying? What were they filming? What were all the scripts needed, what do you mean by "ready," and how does this relate to the camp they set up?

Is there a reason she left Essanay? Do you have any information about her life after this time or about the cause of her death? If possible you could include a section about her private life: since you indicate in some places she was married, had children (one of whom died,) and you also indicate the date of her death. It would be nice to have all her family matters laid out in an accessible manner somewhere as well.

Overall, good job on finding specific and evocative information about someone from so long ago! Especially well done since it seems most of her work is lost. Your article could be very strong if the structure and organization is developed further.

Soka95 (talk) 03:49, 18 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment

This article is or was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Ritanour. Peer reviewers: Soka95.

Above undated message substituted from Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org assignment by PrimeBOT (talk) 14:30, 18 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]