Talk:Joseph Hobson/GA1
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Reviewer: Amitchell125 (talk · contribs) 22:04, 1 October 2020 (UTC)
Happy to review this one.
Assessment
[edit]Lead section / Infobox
[edit]Link Great Western Railway (there’s a choice, I’m not sure which one you need).- Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:32, 2 October 2020 (UTC)
Link Grand Trunk Railway.- Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:32, 2 October 2020 (UTC)
Unlink first in 'first St. Clair railway tunnel'.- Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:32, 2 October 2020 (UTC)
The lead section needs to have more about Hobson's life.- Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:32, 2 October 2020 (UTC)
- (not done)
- Done - Expanded lead further. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:55, 3 October 2020 (UTC)
I don’t think it’s a problem for this article, but just to say that image is clearly copyright, but the source cannot be verified.- Done Replaced with 1909 public domain image, with link --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:32, 2 October 2020 (UTC)
Early life and education
[edit]...for a provincial land surveyor. - needs to be copy edited to improve the prose.- Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:37, 2 October 2020 (UTC)
Engineering career
[edit]- Link
Wellington, Grey and Bruce Railway; International Railway Bridge (in the text and in the caption); electric trains (Electric locomotive). - Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:05, 2 October 2020 (UTC)
- (not done)
- Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 12:07, 3 October 2020 (UTC)
- Link
'Engineering' in the title is redundant.- Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:05, 2 October 2020 (UTC)
- (not done)
- Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 12:07, 3 October 2020 (UTC)
...onsite resident engineer… - wouldn’t either onsite or resident be redundant here?- Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:05, 2 October 2020 (UTC)
...half mile long… - should be ‘...half-mile (0.80 km) long…’,- Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:05, 2 October 2020 (UTC)
When this project was done… - ‘On its completion…’ sounds better imo.- Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:05, 2 October 2020 (UTC)
Convert 6,025 feet; 11,500 feet.- Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:05, 2 October 2020 (UTC)
There are two many images of the tunnel in the gallery. As the topic is about Hobson and not the St Clair tunnel, I would only use one.- Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:05, 2 October 2020 (UTC)
Personal life
[edit]Hobson was a member of the Canadian and American Societies of Civil Engineers and a member of the Institution of Civil Engineers of London, England. - is the wrong section.- Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:12, 2 October 2020 (UTC)
He also was a member in the Caledon Mountain Trout Club. is not noteworthy, and needs to be edited out.- Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:12, 2 October 2020 (UTC)
...when 84 years old. - amend to ‘...at the age of 84.’ to improve the prose.- Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:12, 2 October 2020 (UTC)
I would expect there to be more biographical details, which may be available from Irwin or elsewhere. If I find any, I'll pass them on.- Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:12, 2 October 2020 (UTC)
- (not done)
- Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 14:59, 3 October 2020 (UTC)
References
[edit]The url in Refs 2 (Irwin) and 4 (OALS) don’t work.- Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 21:02, 2 October 2020 (UTC)
The url to Ref 5 (Cook) is unnecessary, as it doesn't give access to the text.- Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 21:02, 2 October 2020 (UTC)
Sources
[edit]Link Joseph Nathan Kane; William D. Middleton; Ramsay Cook.- Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 21:09, 2 October 2020 (UTC)
On hold
[edit]On hold for a week until 10 October to allow time to address the issues. Regards, Amitchell125 (talk) 18:15, 2 October 2020 (UTC)
- @Amitchell125: All issues have been addressed. Can you take another look. Thanks. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 21:09, 2 October 2020 (UTC)
- A few points still outstanding; thanks for your work so far. Amitchell125 (talk) 07:07, 3 October 2020 (UTC)
- @Amitchell125: All further issues addressed. Can you take another look. Thanks. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 15:01, 3 October 2020 (UTC)
- A few points still outstanding; thanks for your work so far. Amitchell125 (talk) 07:07, 3 October 2020 (UTC)
Passing
[edit]Looks fine now. Article passed, well done. Amitchell125 (talk) 15:14, 3 October 2020 (UTC)