Talk:Joseph Goebbels/GA1

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Reviewer: Jonas Vinther (talk · contribs) 23:17, 17 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Will review this right after I get home from work tomorrow. Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 23:17, 17 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Okay, I'm home. Let's do this! :)

First part

"Paul Joseph Goebbels was born in Rheydt, an industrial town south of Mönchengladbach near Düsseldorf" - mention date Done
"Both parents" - tweak to "Both of his parents" Done
"His father Fritz was a clerk in a factory" - tweak to "His father Fritz was a factory clerk" Done
"his mother Katharina (née Odenhausen)" - shouldn't "née" be written in italics? Done
"and Maria (1910–1949); the last married the German filmmaker Max W. Kimmich in 1938" - tweak to "and Maria (1910–1949), who married the German filmmaker Max W. Kimmich in 1938" Done
"Goebbels suffered from ill health during his childhood" - curb "his" Done
"He had a deformed right foot (clubfoot) which turned inwards" - remove brackets and link clubfoot in deformed right foot bit Done
"due to a congenital deformity" - link Congenital disorder Done
"He was educated at a Christian Gymnasium" - write "Goebbels" when it's a new paraprah and also since you used "he" in the previous sentence Done
"His parents initially hoped that he would become a Catholic priest" - does Manvell & Fraenkel 2010 mention whether Goebbels had any interest in this or what his thoughts about becomming a preist was? If so, seems worth adding Done
"Perhaps in compensation for his physical disabilities" - this sentence strikes me as very much Wikipedia:VAGUE Fixed
"He wrote a semi-autobiographical novel, Michael, a three-part work of which only Parts I and III have survived" - what year did he write the book? I see it was published by the NSDAP in 1929, but surely he must written it before that. Right? If not, it seems strange to add a 1929 event in the "Early life" section. Fixed
"At the University of Heidelberg, he wrote his doctoral thesis on Wilhelm von Schütz" - again, I strongly recommend using "Goebbels" when it's a new paragraph Done
"and indicated a growing anti-Semitism" - curb the "a" bit Done
"Goebbels stated the "enchantment [was] ruined". He continued to see her on and off until 1927" - tweak this to "Goebbels stated the "enchantment [was] ruined", but nevertheless continued to see her on and off until 1927" Fixed
"Hitler was sentenced to prison, and was released on 20 December 1924" - tweak to "Hitler was sentenced to five years in prison, but released on 20 December 1924" Done
"and was given party badge number 8762" - tweak to "becoming member #8762 Done
"to a meeting at Bamberg" - tweak to "to a special conference in Bamberg" Done
"I no longer fully believe in Hitler. That's the terrible thing: my inner support has been taken away" - mention this is a diary quote Done Kershaw does not specifically say this, so I have changed the cite to Longerich.
"and by 1930 there was a dramatic increase in unemployment" - tweak to "and by 1930 there was a dramatic increase in unemployment and run-away inflation" Not done The inflationary period was in the 1920s, not 1930s. Hyperinflation in the Weimar Republic.
"with the slogan "the Führer over Germany" - I believe the slogan was "Hitler over Germany" Not done Both Thacker (p.127) and Kershaw (p.227) say "the Führer over Germany".

Second part

Okay, will take a short break and continue at "Propaganda Minister" when I return. Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 14:48, 18 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]

"unless they were on the approved list" - tweak to unless they were approved Fixed
"On 2 September 1939 (a few days after the start of the war)" - tweak to "On 2 September 1939 (a day after the start of the war)" or something similar Done
"Albert Speer, Hitler's architect and Minister for Armaments and War Production" - tweak to "Albert Speer, Hitler's architect and later Minister for Armaments and War Production" Done
"and crucifixes were removed from state buildings" - like Bormann's article, mention Hitler later reversed this policy in a note and use the same source (Rees & Kershaw 2012) Done
"Still Goebbels was well aware" - add comma after "Still" Done
"for troops on the eastern front" - "eastern front" should be capitalized and linked
"In actuality the defence of areas" - add comma before "actuality" Done I think you meant "after" :)
"Göring's Luftwaffe attempted to retaliate" - no need to italicize "Luftwaffe" per WP:COMMON Done
"to inject his six children with morphine so that when they were unconscious, an ampule of cyanide could be crushed in each of their mouths" - tweak to "to inject his six children with morphine so that when they were unconscious, an ampule of cyanide could then be crushed in each of their mouths" Done
"and were given a coup de grâce immediately afterwards" - no need to italicize coup de grâce Done
Article does not mention he received the Golden Party Badge. Add it somewhere. That is all I can find. If the rest of these issues are fixed, I'm passing the article. Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 19:07, 18 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]
- I have completed the tasks except for adding the Golden Party Badge, as it's not mentioned in any of the books I have here. Perhaps Kierzek has a source? -- Diannaa (talk) 22:06, 18 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  - I don't know for a fact he received the Golden Party Badge; I just saw his article was in the recipients category so I assumed so. Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 23:46, 18 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]
    - I don't recall reading it specifically but will double-check when I get home. Clearly he did receive it as he is shown wearing it in the photo we have up in the section: "Propagandist in Berlin", giving a speech in Berlin (1934). Kierzek (talk) 13:22, 19 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]
      - To be honest, I think a Bundesarchiv image of him wearing it is just as good as a source. I'm passing this article, excellent job both of you. :) Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 16:44, 19 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]
        Jonas, thank you for your time and the review; and thanks to Diannaa, my cohort. Cheers, Kierzek (talk) 17:32, 19 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]