Talk:Joseph A. Lopez/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 19:44, 18 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

"1781 – 1841" unspaced.
- I think it's pretty standard that you can put a space between dates separated by an en-dash. Ergo Sum 14:22, 19 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  - Nope, per MOS between years like that it's unspaced en-dash. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 14:45, 19 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
    - Does it matter that it's now not just two years, but a year and a specific date? Ergo Sum 19:38, 19 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
      - Yes, spaced en-dash is now the order of the day! The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 19:39, 19 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
" lasted only several months" reads curiously to me, maybe replace several with "a matter of"?
- Done. Ergo Sum 14:23, 19 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
" to St. Inigoes, Maryland, he garnered a" seems to be missing something like "where".
- I don't see a grammatical error. The garnering refers to the time of his presidency. Ergo Sum 14:24, 19 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  - I missed the "though" at the start of the sentence, my fault, please ignore. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 14:47, 19 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
"sent to St. Inigoes, Maryland, he garnered a reputation" in what capacity?
- Can you explain? Ergo Sum 14:24, 19 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  - What did he do there as a vocation? The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 14:46, 19 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
    - I've added that he was sent there to recuperate. Ergo Sum 19:39, 19 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Do we know how many children there were in total?
- The sources says at least four, but seems to suggest there were more than that. I don't have an exact number. Ergo Sum 14:25, 19 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
"Huarte enrolled her daughters in the Georgetown Visitation Academy, which two of the daugheters" probably no need to repeat (and mis-spell!) daughter in this context.
- Fixed. Ergo Sum 14:26, 19 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
You have "Georgetown College" as a pipe twice but with different links, that's confusing.
- Fixed. Ergo Sum 14:26, 19 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Lead has "first pres of college" and prose has "first pres of university". In the UK these are different things, so perhaps we can align the nomenclature here?
- Fixed. Ergo Sum 14:27, 19 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
"The only notable event that occurred..." this is somewhat POV.
- Fair. That's how the source puts it, but I've rephrased. Ergo Sum 14:28, 19 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
"His presidency lasted only several months, before he became ill,[4] and was succeeded " same comment re: "only several", and the lead suggested he resigned, but that doesn't seem to be mentioned here?
- I've rephrased again. I've kept resignation though, because he resigned due to illness. Ergo Sum 14:29, 19 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
No need to link coffin.
- Unlinked. Ergo Sum 14:29, 19 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Short article, well constructed, just a few brief notes above, so I'll put it on hold while we go through them. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 08:00, 19 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

@The Rambling Man: Thanks for your comments. I've left a note on each. Ergo Sum 14:30, 19 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
- @The Rambling Man: It appears that things are looking squared away. Ergo Sum 19:40, 19 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  - Indeed, I was just taking a final pass. As always, a good piece of work, nice doing business with you. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 19:43, 19 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

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