Talk:Jordan Love/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk · contribs) 20:17, 23 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

I will review this shortly. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 20:17, 23 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Early life

You mention his father a lot (understandably) but do we know anything about his mother? If you can find her job, you can add it after His father, Orbin Jr., was a police officer for the Bakersfield Police Department
- I haven't seen anything about his mom other than what is in there right now about her helping to convince him to not quit football. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 16:50, 25 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]
  - His mom worked as an officer for the California Highway Patrol. She took care of Jordan and his three sisters Kami, Emily, and Alexis after Orbin's death. [1] HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 20:58, 25 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]
    - Not thrilled with Sportskeeda as a reliable source. That said, the "In the name of Love" article actually does mention her career. I added it here. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 21:58, 25 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]
His only scholarship offer came from Utah State The reference doesn't say that. It just says: or earn a scholarship to Utah State.
- Fixed. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 16:50, 25 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Other

If you're interested, Ronika Stone might qualify for a Wikipedia article given her collegiate accomplishments [2]
- That's why I red linked it, but volleyball isn't my cup of tea for writing articles. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 16:50, 25 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

HickoryOughtShirt?4, did you have any other comments? « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 17:48, 25 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Ya, I just like to split them up so people don't get overwhelmed. I am a bit busy today but I will add more soon. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 18:41, 25 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

No worries, thanks. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 18:55, 25 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

HickoryOughtShirt?4, I have a number of GAs under my belt and have done a ton of reviews. If you are ok with it, I would prefer to just have all your comments to address at once, instead of splitting them up. I am fine to wait for you to complete your full review and then address any comments. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 22:02, 25 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Ya, of course sorry. I felt bad not being to get it all done in one go. If you don't mind waiting a couple days, I can get it all done at once. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 23:17, 25 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Yep, no rush :) « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 16:17, 26 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Review cont.

It's crazy that a rookie can sign for a $12.3 million with a signing bonus of over $6.5 million! That's more than Connor McDavid.
It was the first time a quarterback received a fully guaranteed contract since the rookie pay scale was changed. The reference doesn't say this. It says: It's the first time the No. 26 pick has received a fully guaranteed deal under the current rookie contract system. It's interesting but I find it funny how specific this "first" is.
Just an option, you don't have to, but it may be a good idea to explain why Love jumped to Number 2. I assumed it was because Boyle left/was injured but it looks like it was also bc Rogers didn't report for offseason workouts.
replacing Aaron Rodgers don't need his first name here.
Love relieved Aaron Rodgers please remove the Wikilink and his first name
The Packers would finish the year 8–9, missing the playoffs for the first time in three seasons. - The reference says The Packers (8-9) missed the playoffs for the first time in Matt LaFleur's four seasons as coach. So wouldn't it be four seasons?
the Packers completed a trade sending Aaron Rodgers to New York for draft picks please remove the Wikilink and his first name
third different quarterback to start week 1, I think week should be capitalized here
- HickoryOughtShirt?4 I believe I have addressed all your comments in these edits. Thanks. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 16:25, 30 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]