Talk:Johnny Fripp/GA1

GA Review

Unsuccessful. ~~ AirshipJungleman29 (talk) 20:15, 22 December 2023 (UTC)[reply]

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Reviewer: WikiOriginal-9 (talk · contribs) 07:42, 22 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Notes

Added Category:Royal Canadian Air Force personnel of World War II and skiing coaches.
Could you find anything on his high school career? Did he play football or anything?
What's the Dominion Championships? The article makes it sound like going to the Olympics is a downgrade.
"competed against American and Austrian professionals" Those are both linked but Canadisn isn't linked in the lead and Americans is earlier in the body but not linked?
"professionals and placed " A lot of ands here. Suggest changing to "professionals, placing"
The "Montreal team" is the Montreal Bulldogs.
"Baz O'Meara claimed he was ineligible to play due to" should we change it to "play as an amateur"?
"re-joined the Ottawa Rough Riders" remove ottawa
"before retiring from football" doesnt technically say he "retired"
Why is he in the QB cat? Is that the flying wing?
"He played the flying wing position" i dont see in ref four where it sayd that unless you are using PFA but thats not what is cited. Where did you get "back" from in the infobox"?
"but left before the season start" The season had already started

I think that's all. WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 08:11, 22 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Closed with the nominator BeanieFan11's permission. ~~ AirshipJungleman29 (talk) 20:15, 22 December 2023 (UTC)[reply]

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.