Talk:Johnny Antonelli/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Kosack (talk · contribs) 12:42, 5 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

I'll pick this one up, review coming as soon as possible. Kosack (talk) 12:42, 5 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Initial review

Lead

Where is his middle name sourced?
His height and weight aren't sourced anywhere that I can see either.
It's a little repetitive to mention the $52,000 bonus twice in short succession perhaps. Do we need both mentions?
"never pitching more than 96 innings", perhaps add "in a single year" or similar if that's what is implied?

Early life

Probably worth adding "née" in the brackets ahead of Messore.
Is Jefferson High School mentioned here Thomas Jefferson High School (Rochester, New York)?
"from nine of the 16 Major League Baseball teams", avoid switching between digits and words when using comparable figures, per MOS:NUMNOTES.
Add (MLB) after Major League Baseball to explain further uses of the abbreviation.
"the largest bonus", was this the largest signing bonus so to speak? If so I would add that to the sentence perhaps.
"the largest bonus in baseball history at the time.[2][1][3]" although it's not a hard and fast rule, refs are generally presented in numerical order unless there's a specific reason not to.
"fighting for Boston's first National League pennant", fighting seems a little sensationalist. Perhaps, just challenging or competing?

Braves' "bonus baby"

"Antonelli gain more experience. Antonelli", the double use of Antonelli in quick succession is a little repetitive here. Perhaps drop the second for "He"?
"in a 4– triumph", something missing here.

Giants' All-Star pitcher

"Willie Mays biographer" > Mays'
"led the league in ERA", is there a need to relink ERA again here? It's used pretty frequently prior to this and is linked appropriately at the first usage.
Add a convert template for "100 degrees Fahrenheit".
"suspended Antonelli indefinitely without pay, pending an apology", do we know if he made the apology or Durocher relented?
- It wasn't clear in the sources I found, which is why I left it unclear in the article. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 13:52, 6 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"from Section Five of the Polo Grounds", Polo Grounds is used here but not linked until the next mention.

Indians and Braves, retirement

Polo Grounds is linked again here.

References

Ref 4 uses a different date format for the archive and accessdates.
Other than that, the refs seem well formatted and a few random spot checks of info check out.

Overall, a high quality article with only some minor points to pick up on. Placed on hold for now while these are addressed. Kosack (talk) 09:43, 6 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

All of my comments have been suitably addressed, happy to promote now. Kosack (talk) 19:05, 6 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]