Talk:John Williams (snooker referee)/GA1
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 05:11, 1 October 2020 (UTC)
Going to review this for the GAN October 2020 Backlog Drive. MWright96 (talk) 05:11, 1 October 2020 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail:
Lead
[edit]- An infobox in the lede might help things here
- Maybe, but I don't think they are mandatory. I'm not really sure which one to use, so I didn't. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 21:35, 2 October 2020 (UTC)
- Fair enough. It is only a suggestion. 07:03, 3 October 2020 (UTC)
- Maybe, but I don't think they are mandatory. I'm not really sure which one to use, so I didn't. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 21:35, 2 October 2020 (UTC)
- "he took charge of the events quickly and organised the events for many years." - this sentence could be reworded to avoid repetition of the word "events"
- done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 21:35, 2 October 2020 (UTC)
- "and lead to more television coverage." - and resulted in
- "but has made sporadic appearances " - made
- done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 21:35, 2 October 2020 (UTC)
Early life
[edit]- Perhaps add where Rubaon is in Wales?
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 21:35, 2 October 2020 (UTC)
- I think the second and third sentences in this section can be merged together
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 21:35, 2 October 2020 (UTC)
- "His grandfather had been British Bar billiards champion" - I don't think "Bar billiards" needs to begin with a capital letter
- Fixed Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 21:35, 2 October 2020 (UTC)
- Any information on the occupation of his first wife?
- I only have info on the names, but I'll do a search. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 21:35, 2 October 2020 (UTC)
- I don't think divorce should be wikilinked
- done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 21:35, 2 October 2020 (UTC)
Referee career
[edit]- "during the mid 1960s" - a hyphen is missing in the text in bold
- done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 21:44, 2 October 2020 (UTC)
- "Williams started refereeing snooker matches during the mid 1960s, leaving the civil service in 1981 to become a full-time referee." - much of his information is not backed up by the BBC Sport reference. An extra source is needed to verify this information
- Added Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 21:44, 2 October 2020 (UTC)
- The first mention of the word table should be linked to Billiards table
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 21:44, 2 October 2020 (UTC)
- "which was covered in a tarpauline" - typo; should be tarpaulin
- If you hadn't guessed, I can't spell. Mine still looks more right to me! done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 21:44, 2 October 2020 (UTC)
- "This led to news picturing Williams" - led to the press might be an improvement here
- Good point. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 21:44, 2 October 2020 (UTC)
- "finals of any referee,[6][5]" - refs in numerical order please
- done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 21:44, 2 October 2020 (UTC)
- Wikilink black to the relevant article
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs)
- "In total, Williams took officiated 11 World finals," - the word in bold isn't needed
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs)
- "The last world championship final he refereed was in 2002, when Peter Ebdon beat Stephen Hendry in a deciding frame." - The Irish Times does not contain any of this information, only the Sky Sports source attached to it
- Removed Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 21:44, 2 October 2020 (UTC)
- "In 1983, Williams was awarded a two-year suspended prison sentence," - I think received is a more appropriate word for this portion of text
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 21:44, 2 October 2020 (UTC)
- "after pleading guilty to selling snooker tables worth £6,500 that did not exist." - more concise; selling non-existant snooker tables worth £6,500.
- Changed Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 21:44, 2 October 2020 (UTC)
- Is there any information about the end result of Williams suing the WPBSA for wrongful dismissal?
- I didn't see much. I don't think that it ever went as far as the courts. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 21:44, 2 October 2020 (UTC)
- "They refereed the final of 17 of the first 20 World Championship finals held at the Crucible." - the word in bold should be changed to Crucible Theatre for formality
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 21:44, 2 October 2020 (UTC)
- Wikilink Sydney Lee to the relevant article
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 21:44, 2 October 2020 (UTC)
- "he became the referee in snooker television show" - of the
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 21:44, 2 October 2020 (UTC)
- Wikilink 2012 tournament to 2012 World Seniors Championship
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 21:44, 2 October 2020 (UTC)
References
[edit]- Be consistent in how World Snooker is written in the references. For example one reference is written as worldsnooker.com whereas another is written as World Snooker
- References 4, 11 are missing the author(s)
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 21:50, 2 October 2020 (UTC)
- Reference 8 is missing the publisher and isbn number
- I believe it's a self published source, so has neither. Chris Downer has been considered a reliable source for some time, but happy to open something formal on this. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 21:50, 2 October 2020 (UTC)
- The title of Reference 11 does not need to be all in capital letters per MOS:ALLCAPS
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 21:50, 2 October 2020 (UTC)
- Reference 15 title: "In brief {} Snooker" - this error needs fixing
- DOne Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 21:50, 2 October 2020 (UTC)
Will put the review on hold to allow the nominator to address or query the points raised above. MWright96 (talk) 06:16, 1 October 2020 (UTC)
- I've covered most of the above, let me know what you think MWright96. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 21:50, 2 October 2020 (UTC)
- Was there anything else to take a look at here MWright96? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 19:35, 4 October 2020 (UTC)
- @Lee Vilenski: Now promoting to GA class. MWright96 (talk) 06:53, 5 October 2020 (UTC)
- Was there anything else to take a look at here MWright96? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 19:35, 4 October 2020 (UTC)