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Reviewer: Anotherclown (talk · contribs) 00:46, 3 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Progression

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  • Version of the article when originally reviewed: [1]
  • Version of the article when review was closed: [2]

Technical review

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Criteria

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  • It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS):
    • Incorrect use of an adjective here: "...before his 1956 retirement...", should just be "...before his retirement in 1956..."
    • Seems a little strangely worded: "...and received recruit training in San Diego...", consider instead "...and completed recruit training in San Diego..."
    • I know this is a quote but is there a word missing here: "...That damned hero stuff is a bunch crap...", should it be "bunch of crap"? If its an error in the actual quote no need to change just include "sic" in square brackets.
    • Date formats in the references section are inconsistent. For instance in places you use: "Retrieved 1 April 2013", while in others "Retrieved 2009-07-29". Article appears to predominately use the for Month Day, Year (ie. May 8, 1941) so this should probably be used throughout per WP:MOSDATE.
    • Some of the references lack place of publication while others have. Pls include for the fol: Willbanks and Leahy. (I think that's all that needs it - but pls check for others).
      • Think it would be best to include the info from those missing it rather than deleting it so I've gone ahead and done it. Pls feel free to bin it if you have an objection though. Anotherclown (talk) 22:16, 3 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]
      • One further point: some of the newspaper articles in the references late a date of retrieval and publisher and location details. Could these details also be added? Anotherclown (talk) 22:16, 3 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
    • All major points cited using WP:RS.
    • No issues with OR.
  • It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
    • Most major points seem to be covered without going into undue detail.
  • It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    a (fair representation): b (all significant views):
    • No issues here.
  • It is stable.
    No edit wars etc.:
    • No issues here.
  • It contains images, where possible, to illustrate the topic.
    a (tagged and captioned): b (Is illustrated with appropriate images): c (non-free images have fair use rationales): d public domain pictures appropriately demonstrate why they are public domain:
    • Images used are in the public domain and seem appropriate for the article.
I have made changes requested, please see this diff. Kindly let me know if there is anything else that needs to be done for elevation/promotion of this article.--RightCowLeftCoast (talk) 20:50, 3 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Gday. Looks good. Just one outstanding point above IRT the refs. Thanks. Anotherclown (talk) 22:16, 3 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]
I have added the missing accessdates, here is the diff.--RightCowLeftCoast (talk) 13:51, 4 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Passing now. Anotherclown (talk) 22:11, 4 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks Anotherclown for reviewing this article. FYI, I attended his service and funeral, as did Duncan Hunter, Duncan D. Hunter, Nick Popaditch, several Pearl Harbor survivors, as well as dozens of others.--RightCowLeftCoast (talk) 23:52, 4 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]
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