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GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 20:55, 27 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Shall be reviewing for the GAN October 2020 Backlog Drive. MWright96 (talk) 20:55, 27 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:


Infobox

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  • The text in the best known and notable work can begin with a capital letter


Lead

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  • Wiklink Michigan-Canadian border to the relevant article


  • "and enabled United States Mail delivery to ships 'on the fly' by addressing to the ships name and the only floating postal zip code of 48222." - repetition of "ships"


  • Wikilink zip code to the relevant article


  • "This developed out further in the twentieth-first century by specially designed supply boats" - twenty-first


Early life and education

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  • "He had four brothers (George, Edward, Charles, David) and two sisters (Mary Jane, Susie)" - the parentheses are not needed IMO


Career

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  • "He also developed the first lightship on Lake St. Clair in Michigan. This he did by buying an old flat-bottomed boat and put a light on it as a guiding light for ships on the lake." - consider merging these two sentences together


  • Wikilink Detroit River


  • "They were range indicators on Windmill Point as a guiding light" - typo; should be There


  • "Wescott in the 1870s was working in Detroit as agent representative " - as an agent



  • "the service provided shipping trade information and national-international news." - national and international news.


  • "The procedure then was that a man in a rowboat was towed out by the Florence B." - The following procedure saw a man


  • "it was then rowed to the next oncoming freighter to do the same procedure." - and it was subsequently


  • "and by 1972 was accounting for over 700,000 pieces of mail being handled per year." - more than


  • "Wescott's service meant that ships didn't have to stop and go ashore" - no contractions please


  • "to pick up their mail" - collect


  • "the SS J.W. Wescott No.1." - the word in bold needs spacing after the period


  • "It was renewed on a United States Postal Service contract in 1974. The work was done by non-postal employees of the Wescott Company around the clock seven days a week." -

think these two sentences can be merged together


  • "The larger vessels and freighters traveling the Detroit River do not stop in general," - traveling down the


  • "As of 2017, the company gets about a third of its income from the post office," - The company currently receives


Personal life

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  • "Wescott was an alderman in the fourth Ward in Detroit from 1884 to 1885. He was associated with the Episcopalian church." - consider merging these two sentences together


  • "He was a member in several clubs" - of


  • "In has activities as a ship captain" - his


References

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Will put the review on hold to allow the nominator to address or query the points raised above. MWright96 (talk) 10:07, 28 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]