Talk:John S. Clark/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 11:26, 24 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I came to know that 60 years of this notable man's death will be completed within a week from now. I feel I should give this a shove ahead, to have the article in shape by then. Sainsf (talk · contribs) 11:26, 24 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for taking on this review, especially at this convenient time. I'll get to your issues very shortly, (will fix up fix the urls first). Seems antbase is acting up at the moment, but all of the dead links can be easily replaced. You're also the first editor to review a myrmecologist, which is a step forward in expanding the knowledge of ants. These are the men and women who are behind the scenes, so a nice article is deserving. Burklemore1 (talk) 08:23, 25 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

That makes me feel special! Indeed, awesome plan! Sainsf (talk · contribs) 09:39, 25 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

One less stub too! Burklemore1 (talk) 09:59, 25 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

Would you mind linking "ant" in the lead? Not that readers don't know what it means, but it would be a good one for those who wish to know more on the field he worked on.

Done.

Clark first arrived in Australia in 1905 and originally worked for the state railways in Queensland. At a young age, he developed and interest in entomology, collecting his first specimens in North Queensland. It appears the interest began before he arrived in Australia. If I am right, the lines should be swapped (except the "Born in Glasgow" part, of course).

Done.

You can name the spouses.

Done.

He married his second wife several years later 1935 does not look so far off from 1939. Also, the year of the second marriage should be mentioned, I think.

Did some tweaks.

publish his first articles in 1921 about pest insects and ants --> publish his first articles about pest insects and ants from 1921

Done.

but in 1926 he became an entomologist No contrast apparent, you can replace the "but" by a semicolon

Done.

Wikilink Victoria and primitive (primitive (phylogenetics))

Done.

Biography

Wikilink Perth. I may have missed some other cities, ensure consistency in linking them.

Linked.

discussing the history of entomology in Western Australia Does it mean it was in 1921 and in Western Australia that he began publishing on the history of "entomology", or he began publishing on the history of "entomology in this place" in 1921?

Yes, in 1921, and also yes to "history of entomology in this place (WA)". I think if we were talking about its general history, Western Australia wouldn't be mentioned since that'd be redundant.

and also on basic articles Remove "on"

Removed.

for about £200 Don't include "200" in the link

Done.

Bearing two more daughters, Claringbull committed suicide It seems his wife had more than two daughters, and as if they were the reason of the suicide.

Changed.

Clark's attitude to his peers and superiors How exactly was his attitude? High-handed?

"intemperate" according to the source.

Research

Clark is perhaps notable for describing the dinosaur ant Why "perhaps"?

Changed to "most", owing to the immense scientific interest of the ant that followed, also helps because it is considered his greatest achievement. Burklemore1 (talk) 08:46, 25 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Sources

Some of the URLs look inaccessible. Check this.

Fixed. Some links from antcat may bug out and say "error" or whatever, but they work. Just have to click them multiple times. Burklemore1 (talk) 09:07, 25 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

No dablinks or duplinks, no copyvio detected, images are properly licensed. Sainsf (talk · contribs) 12:15, 24 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I think I have addressed all of your points, mind having a look? Burklemore1 (talk) 09:30, 25 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks, everything looks in order now, and I will go ahead and promote this. Thanks for all your excellent work on this, with such a good intention ("your way of honouring him", as you say). I would like to add two points; would you mind rechecking the "importance" parameter in Ants task force for this article? I think this deserves at least "Mid" as a prominent myrmecologist's article. Secondly, try for a DYK that could appear on the main page on June 1. Sainsf (talk · contribs) 09:39, 25 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

OK, elevated to mid importance. I'll look into the DYK; if I do, hopefully it makes an appearance on 1 June. Burklemore1 (talk) 09:48, 25 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]