Talk:John Joscelyn/GA1

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Reviewer: Parrot of Doom 13:26, 16 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewing... Parrot of Doom 13:26, 16 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

"John Joscelyn was their third son to survive childhood" - might infancy be a better phrase? I'm presuming of course that most children who die do so in infancy.
- I'm a bit afraid to go with "infancy" since my source just says "was the third surviving son of Sir Thomas Joscelin". Ealdgyth - Talk 14:01, 16 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]
"and was probably born at High Roding, Essex, where his father had an estate" - would the alternative phrasing, "and was probably born on his father's estate at High Roding, Essex" be original research?
- No, it wouldn't. Fixing. Ealdgyth - Talk 14:01, 16 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]
"Parker named Joscelyn to a chaplainacy in 1559 shortly after Parker was appointed as archbishop" - who is Parker? The lead names him, but the body doesn't (the sentence has changed slightly as I copyedited it).
- Fixed. Ealdgyth - Talk 14:01, 16 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]
"Besides Greek and Latin, Joscelyn knew Hebrew" - knew it, could speak it, could write it...or just "knew" that Hebrew existed?
- Source just states "Joscelin's scholarly interests extended to Hebrew, a serious accomplishment in his day." Ealdgyth - Talk 14:01, 16 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  - I'd just write something like "Unusually for the time, Joscelin was also a scholar of Hebrew". Parrot of Doom 14:51, 16 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]
    - Rewrote to "Besides Greek and Latin, Joscelyn was a scholar of Hebrew, unusual knowledge for the time." Ealdgyth - Talk 14:54, 16 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]
"'Joscelyn's contributions to the study of Old English have been called "a significant contribution to the development of the study of the language'" - by whom?
- Added citation to quotation. Oops. Ealdgyth - Talk 14:01, 16 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]
"Joscelyn died on 28 December 1602, probably at High Roding, and was buried in All Saint's Church in High Roding. He never married.[1]" - this should come before any mention of his legacy.
- reordered. Ealdgyth - Talk 14:01, 16 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Apart from the above minor points, all is well and I'm happy its of GA-standard. Parrot of Doom 13:47, 16 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Promoted, well done. Parrot of Doom 16:19, 16 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]