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Reviewer: FairyTailRocks (talk · contribs) 06:35, 23 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Here are a few problems @Royroydeb:

Lead
  • Wikilnk "cartilage". Done
  • Add his place of birth here.
Per WP:OPENPARA, birth place and death place should only be included in the lead if it "they are relevant to the person's notability", and his notability is derived from playing football, not being English. Thanks, C679 15:26, 8 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Northampton Town
  • There is no reference beside "Johnson was an unused substitute in the play-offs as Northampton Town lost 3–0 on aggregate against Bradford City." Please fix this. Done
Bengaluru FC
  • I heard that this club has advanced the 2015 AFC Cup, please add that with reference.
The club has advanced to 2015 AFC Champions League qualifiers. If they fail to advance they will play in AFC Cup. RRD13 (talk) 07:07, 14 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Career stats
  • The no. 39 ref should be added to the notes below the table and not the references section.  Done

Can you find any reference or sources that includes his personal life like hobbies and family relatives? Also his early life before football? I assume there is. FairyTailRocks 23:57, 6 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Nothing such is found. RRD13 (talk) 07:07, 14 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]
@User:FairyTailRocks anything more? RRD13 (talk) 08:26, 19 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Would be a good idea to remove the POV from the lead. C679 10:21, 19 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]
I beg your pardon. RRD13 (talk) 09:11, 20 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]
While I'm here, four loan appearances for Tranmere seem to be out of place in the lead, too. C679 10:24, 19 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]

 Done RRD13 (talk) 09:11, 20 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I have addressed the lead. There are a couple of issues within the Northampton section which I have tagged, plus the "Style of Play" section, final two sentences present apparent facts, but these represent opinions, so they should be denoted accordingly. C679 13:12, 22 May 2014 (UTC)  Done RRD13 (talk) 07:27, 23 May 2014 (UTC) Not done the style of play has not been addressed at all. Please do not make false claims. C679 09:46, 23 May 2014 (UTC) Done RRD13 (talk) 17:43, 23 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Done RRD13 (talk) 07:36, 25 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • I agree. The "style of play" are only opinions, who described Johnson as a "lanky centre-back with goalscoring ability"? and are you sure that Johnson is the best import in India? You should specify between a "fact" and an "opinion". FairyTailRocks 10:44, 26 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Now I have reconstructed the Style of Play. RRD13 (talk) 07:13, 28 May 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Great! It looks good right now. But here is my one final look about the article:

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

  1. Is it reasonably well written?
    A. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:
    B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
  2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
    A. Has an appropriate reference section:
    Neatly done.
    B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:
    Full of BBC and Soccerbase references
    C. No original research:
    There are no references in some parts of the "Northampton Town" section and some dead URLs noted under.
  3. Is it broad in its coverage?
    A. Major aspects:
    B. Focused:
  4. Is it neutral?
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. Is it stable?
    No edit wars, etc:
  6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
    A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
    Two images of the article is licensed under Creative Commons
    B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
    Please add WP:ALT text for those who cannot see the images.
  7. Overall:
    Pass or Fail:
    I will wait till tomorrow, before I pass or fail.
Northampton Town
  • No reference beside, A week after his suspension, he scored his first goal as a permanent Northampton player in a 2–0 win over Lincoln City. In his first season at Northampton (as a permanent player), he made 41 appearances and scored seven goals. Done
  • No reference beside, Johnson retained his first team place, making 48 appearances and scoring twice in two consecutive games against Morecambe and Southend. Done
Dead refs
Goal is the only website which provided the lineups for the Federation Cup. As they have removed the information, then I am sorry we will also need to remove them. RRD13 (talk) 07:03, 2 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]
You tell me what should I do about it. Thanks! RRD13 (talk) 07:14, 2 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]
No don't remove it. See if there's any archived captions in the Wayback Machine.

FairyTailRocks 08:58, 2 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]

All completed. RRD13 (talk) 08:03, 3 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Fix the archived reference more specific. Please see Template:Cite web#Examples under the "Using "archiveurl" and "archivedate" (and optionally "deadurl") for webpages that have been archived" header. Also just like what I have said, please add the WP:ALT parameter for those who cannot see the image. FairyTailRocks 21:13, 12 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Done. RRD13 (talk) 07:07, 17 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Since FTR hasn't been active of late and everything's addressed above, I'm closing this review. Wizardman 19:13, 13 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]

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