Talk:John Hummer/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 05:23, 23 April 2010 (UTC)

Here are the concerns I found with this article:

• "He stands eighth in career free throws made (297), having only been passed by Craig Robinson and Kit Mueller." Well, those two would make him third, so it's confusing as written currently.
  • Fixed.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 23:38, 23 April 2010 (UTC)
• The amateur career section seems to trend towards the other players and coaches fairly often. Not overly concerning, but there are areas where it isn't needed (i.e. the second mention of McMillan's Lions)
  • Although McMillan is not widely-remembered now, he was one of the most successful Ivy League players of all-time both in college and as a pro. I believe he led Columbia to its only NCAA appearance. I think people should have perspective of which team we are talking about.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 16:12, 24 April 2010 (UTC)
• "but the 36–46 Bill Russell-coached 1973–74 SuperSonics would not" Not seeing any relevance to this article. Yes Hummer played for the Sonics later on, but I don't find this necessary.
  • Clarified.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 16:03, 24 April 2010 (UTC)
• "Hummer appeared in six of games, but accumulated no points" Six of what?
  • Clarified--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 15:57, 24 April 2010 (UTC)
• Anything on attempting to join another team after 1976, or a retirement?
  • I have no information on his career between 1976 and 1978 (when he presumably started his graduate program)

I'll put it on hold for five days and pass when the issues are fixed. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 05:23, 23 April 2010 (UTC)

Looks good now, so the article passes. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 17:14, 24 April 2010 (UTC)