Talk:John Harvey Kellogg/GA1
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Reviewer: Carbrera (talk · contribs) 02:04, 22 March 2017 (UTC)
Overall
[edit]I'm sorry to come to this conclusion so quickly, but this article needs a lot of additional work before reaching the GA status.
- Large amounts of this article are unsourced; in fact, almost every section contains paragraphs without references
- Additionally, this article relies far too much on block quotes rather than textual evidence found elsewhere
- This is an easy fix, but the lead should cover all major topics discussed within the article itself, so it needs to be expanded because at its current state it is quite lacking
- Some of the language/diction in this article seems to be written more like an essay:
- "The issues that had been simmering came..."
- "Kellogg was not only a physician, surgeon, author, and administrator, but also an inventor."
- This article also includes various tags such as "This section needs expansion" and "This section does not cite any source", which is enough to fail the article during a GAR anyway.
I would like to see what this article could come to in the future, so please continue working on it! Please ping with me any additional help and/or questions; I'd be glad to answer them to the best of my abilities. This article is just a bit too far away from the necessary criterion at the moment. Regards, Carbrera (talk) 02:39, 22 March 2017 (UTC).