Talk:Johann Lamont/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Coemgenus (talk · contribs) 15:51, 21 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, no copyvios, spelling and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

I'll start this review today or tomorrow. --Coemgenus (talk) 15:51, 21 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Images and their captions are fine, both creative commons shots from Flickr, tagged correctly.

Good summary, but one minor point: "convener" could use a link (I'd never heard the word before).

She was identified here as Roman Catholic, but I can find no reliable sources to confirm whether or not this is the case.

OK. If you ever find such a source, it would be useful, but that's good enough for now, I guess.

"...was a representative on the Scottish Constitutional Convention..." adding the year would help place this event in the chronology better.

Done. The SCC was established in 1989, but I've yet to find a source that mentions her in the context of an exact year. The best seems to be one that references her in terms of the decades it was sitting.

And is there any indication why the unusual spelling of her name? Is it a Gaelic thing, or just her parents' preference?

I believe it's a Gaelic language version of Joanna, but sadly no reliable sources for this.

"travellers" and "gypsies" could use a link. Especially travellers -- many non-UK people will be unfamiliar with the term.

...That's all for now, I'll review more later.

Thanks for your comments so far. I've addressed what I can for now, but will keep looking, and look forward to reading the rest of your review. Cheers Paul MacDermott (talk) 17:31, 22 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Were there any policy differences that separated Lamont from Harris and MacIntosh?

You write of the "'huge challenge' of rebuilding public trust in Scottish Labour". Was there something in particular Labour had done to lose the public trust, or was it just a matter of having lost the last election or two?

Done. There was a general decline in support for Labour over the previous decade, which she seems to attribute to their failure to engage with the electorate. I've expanded this a little, but I'll see if I can find more on it, perhaps another report about the interview.

At first glance the Guardian piece seems to be the only one about this, but I'll keep looking.

"...proposed a survival plan requiring employees to accept worse employment terms..." Do you mean reduced pay? Changes in work rules? It's kind of unclear.

That's all I could find to ask about. This is a well-done article, which is often a difficult task with an active politician. Nice work! --Coemgenus (talk) 15:31, 23 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

This is the first political bio I've taken through GAN, so thanks for the support. I should have everything dealt with now, but let me know if there's anything else. Thanks once again for the review. Paul MacDermott (talk) 19:19, 23 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Yes, that all looks good to me. Passed! --Coemgenus (talk) 20:23, 23 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]