Talk:Joel Eriksson Ek/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 14:32, 26 January 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Hello! My name is GhostRiver, and I'll be conducting this GA review. I will assess the article against the good article criteria. Once I complete my review, you will have seven days to implement the suggested edits.

GhostRiver, I believe I have addressed all of your concerns to date. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 16:11, 11 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()

3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()

Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Infobox and lede

Would bulk this up a bit with a couple key moments or stats from after he was drafted

Personal life

Can cut the word "parents" in the first sentence, the "to" already implies parentage Done
hockey playing family as his → hockey playing family: his Done
was drafted by → was selected by or was taken by to limit repetition of "draft" Done
because of his dedication to the sport and his playing skills → due to his playing skills as well as his dedication to the sport Done

Playing career

Sweden

"for ~~the~~ Färjestad BK" wherever it appears Done
Link 2014–15 to 2014–15 SHL season Done
Link first instance of Goal (ice hockey) and Point (ice hockey) Done
Remove hyphen in "three-years" Done
season and eventually raised his draft ranking from 22nd to fourth among all international skaters → season, entering the draft as the fourth-highest rated international skater Done
It was suggested by numerous hockey analysts → Several hockey analysts theorized Done

Minnesota Wild

Comma after ahead of the 2016–17 season Done
Specify which game made him the first Wild teenager to have a three-assist game Done
- The source only says the game was against the Bruins so I added this reference from NHL.com as well to show it was on October 26 and he got three points
"General manager" isn't capitalized Done
in order to not burn the first year of his contract split infinitive + informal language. Suggest combining this with sentence before it to make something like After two games as a healthy scratch, Eriksson Ek was returned to Färjestad BK on 17 November, thus preserving all three years on his rookie contract. Done
Comma after He made his debut in Game 1 of the series Done
Don't need the line about 2017 Worlds here, that'll be covered in the int'l play section Done
Add kg conversion for 10 pounds of muscle Done
Can cut second sentence of second paragraph and just say that USA Today named him a rookie to watch. Done
scored the teams' → scored the team's Done
continued to struggle to score goals and assists → continued his scoring struggles Done
Cut last sentence of second paragraph, Chuck's firing doesn't affect JEE Done
"their momentum ~~was~~ stagnated" Done
This isn't necessary to put in the article, but the Greenway - Eriksson Ek - Kunin line was called the GEEK Squad
- The double E just gives you so much to work with! HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 22:34, 16 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Cut the line about Fenton being replaced by Guerin for the same reason as above (not directly relevant) Done
Comma after lost veteran centerman Mikko Koivu and Eric Staal Done
Cut line about the 2020-21 season format Done
Although he injured his knee in Game 6, Eriksson Ek returned to finish the game but remained injured. Confusing wording Done
"Eriksson Ek remained the Wild's top-line center going into the 2021-22 season but swapped" Done
second-fastest goals to start a game How fast were they? Done
- Added to article. Gotta love oddly specific stats. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 22:34, 16 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

International play

Move medal table to this section per MOS Done
"his home country of Sweden" Done
He first represented Sweden at → He first played with the Sweden under-18 team both for flow and to make the WL make more sense Done
"although the team failed to medal both times." Done
Would be helpful to have his goal and point tallies from all tournaments, not just 2017 Worlds Done

Player profile

Described as an aggressive offensive threat By whom? Done
"Eriksson Ek ~~says he~~ models his game after" Done
"assistant general manager" doesn't need to be capitalized Done
his ability to be a two-way player → his skill as a two-way player Done
Swap the general description from Stubb for the direct quote of "great speed, a good strong shot and excellent puck-handling" Done

Career statistics

Make sure this section is sourced
- At the very bottom of the article, it says Biographical information and career statistics from and then lists a bunch of sources. Is this alright? It is pretty standard on other articles. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 18:41, 19 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  - I've been told the statistics tables need specific citations under them. (Shrug). Something to bring up with the WikiProject. — Ghost River 19:30, 19 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

References

"url-access=subscription" should be noted in any reference from The Athletic Done
Presumably articles put out by the Swedish Hockey League are written in Swedish, not in Finnish? Done
The following publications should be italicized (i.e. marked as "work" and not "publisher"): The Athletic, Star Tribune, USA Today, Sports Illustrated, Twin Cities Pioneer Press, The Hockey News Done
[64] uses NHL.com as the work instead of National Hockey League as the publisher Done
Typo in [69], an additional "M" at the end of "Twin Cities Pioneer Press" Done
Per MOS:ALLCAPS, references in all caps should be reduced to title case Done

Other comments

No stability concerns, nominator is primary editor
One photo is properly licensed. Would recommend cropping so that just Joel is in the photo Done
Earwig copyvio score looks good, a pass reveals it's all proper nouns and direct quotes

HickoryOughtShirt?4 Apologies for the delay, I have been dealing with personal and medical issues. Earwig is down as of my writing this, so I'll let you address the prose comments before I do a CV sweep. Putting on hold. — Ghost River 20:05, 16 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

No worries GhostRiver, health always comes first. Fun fact: I looked at other GA hockey articles for inspiration on the lead and began copying JVR's article when I realized it seemed familiar...two years fly by! HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 18:49, 19 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Made a couple extra tweaks. I'd go to the WikiProject to get clarity on whether career statistics sections should be cited so we can get consensus. Passing now. — Ghost River 19:30, 19 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]