Talk:Joe Shield

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A fact from Joe Shield appeared on Wikipedia's Main Page in the Did you know column on 17 June 2024 (check views). The text of the entry was as follows:

Did you know... that Joe Shield was the first person from Vermont to be drafted into the NFL and then make a team's roster?

A record of the entry may be seen at Wikipedia:Recent additions/2024/June. The nomination discussion and review may be seen at Template:Did you know nominations/Joe Shield.

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Employment

This edit request by an editor with a conflict of interest has now been answered.

Heading and {{edit COI}} template added. ~ ToBeFree (talk) 18:57, 1 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Moved from User_talk:ToBeFree

– ToBeFree (talk) 18:57, 1 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you. My apologies if this is not the forum. Please delete: "preferring the stability of working as a sales representative for a wine company." as Mr. Shield immediately went to work in the Financial Services industry. Wisc1999 (talk) 18:51, 1 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Unless there is a reliable source indicating otherwise, Wikipedia should defer to the newspaper clipping from 1987: "sales representative for a wine company in Boston." However, since the current request is for removal rather than replacement, keeping that out as a disputed fact is acceptable. –Skywatcher68 (talk) 19:06, 1 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Looks like this has been addressed. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 16:52, 4 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

GA Review

The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.

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Nominator: Gonzo fan2007 (talk · contribs) 16:51, 4 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: LunaEatsTuna (talk · contribs) 04:48, 23 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I will review this. Template:LunaEatsTunaSig (talk), posted at 04:48, 23 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Done; over to you! I like your writing style BTW; it reminds me of a modern version of User:Thebiguglyalien's current writing style for some reason. Template:LunaEatsTunaSig (talk), posted at 11:48, 25 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Da review:

Early life

"In high school, Shield" > "During his time there, Shield" – flows better.
I would wikilink most valuable player since it seems relevant enough, but I'll leave it up to you.
How about "and helped lead the team to two consecutive appearances in the state championship game, winning in 1978" – sounds better.
To better connect the last two sentences change the last one to "He then continued his education and participation in baseball and football at Worcester Academy in Massachusetts."

College career

"Shield attended Trinity College" > "Shield attended Trinity College in Hartford, Connecticut" so that it is consistent with the other mentions of schools.
Wikilink passing yards.
"56%" > "56 percent" – for some reason (WP:PERCENT).
Because refs 4 and 5 are identical you should only keep the first and do pages = C1, C8 (or, alternatively, you can make the url = the first page and only do the external link for page C8).

Professional career

"Over 100 people, including family and friends" – I am being pedantic but "Over 100 people, including his family and friends".
"Shield was released" – I would use he here since Shield was just used as the last word in the previous sentence.

Others

(Optional) recommended adding template:use X English if applicable/known.

Spotcheck

All good; passes on refs 1, 2, 5, 9 and 15.
- Thanks for the review LunaEatsTuna. I believe I have addressed all your comments, except about refs 4 and 5. This is just my standard way of citing newspaper articles that go from one page to another. I do this so that a unique archive link can be generated for each url. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 14:48, 26 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  - You are most welcome :) Sure, that sounds fine. I am ready to pass this fantastic article for GA status. Congrats! Template:LunaEatsTunaSig (talk), posted at 22:19, 28 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.

Did you know nomination

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The result was: promoted by Lightburst talk 16:51, 8 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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... that Joe Shield was the first person from Vermont to be drafted into the NFL and then make a team's roster?

Source: Second paragraph, under "2. Joe Shield"

Reviewed: Ice

Improved to Good Article status by Gonzo fan2007 (talk). Number of QPQs required: 1. Nominator has 44 past nominations.

« Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 19:27, 31 May 2024 (UTC).[reply]

Will review this. BeanieFan11 (talk) 19:59, 31 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

General: Article is new enough and long enough
New enough: Long enough:

Policy: Article is sourced, neutral, and free of copyright problems
Adequate sourcing: Neutral: Free of copyright violations, plagiarism, and close paraphrasing:

Hook: Hook has been verified by provided inline citation
Cited: Interesting:

QPQ: Done.

Overall:

Looks good to go. Nice work. BeanieFan11 (talk) 01:59, 7 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]