Talk:Joe Gray (American football)/GA1

GA Review

Passed. ~WikiOriginal-9~ (talk) 18:18, 27 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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Nominator: BeanieFan11 (talk · contribs) 19:16, 23 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: WikiOriginal-9 (talk · contribs) 20:33, 23 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Added some baseball cats
Added army cat.
Added "Members of the Benevolent and Protective Order of Elks", even though it's at CfD right now?
The sources kept calling him a halfback, so I went ahead and added the cat for that.
I'd like the lead to be a little longer.
The early life section isn't chronological right now. Could you change it to "He attended Roosevelt High School, winning three varsity letters on the football team and two on the baseball team, being a two-time first-team All-Portland Interscholastic League (PIL) selection as a back" or something along those lines.
link All-American in the body.

That's all. Nice work. ~WikiOriginal-9~ (talk) 20:33, 23 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@WikiOriginal-9: Expanded the lead and made the other changes. BeanieFan11 (talk) 17:52, 27 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Passing the article. Nice work! ~WikiOriginal-9~ (talk) 18:18, 27 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.