Talk:Jock R. Anderson/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: JoeMeas (talk · contribs) 06:04, 28 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for criteria)

In the lead, grammar and sentence structure could use improvement. Example: From 1978 to 1979, Anderson was Chief Research Economist at the Australian Bureau of Agricultural Economics, the first holder of that role. This sentence can be changed to resemble: Anderson served as the first Chief Research Economist at the Australian Bureau of Agricultural Economics from 1978 to 1979. In the following sentence, stating that Anderson later departed to his full-time position as opposed to departed would improve flow. In the second to last sentence, change science to scientific.

In the Early Life section, where is no need to list every every agricultural output produced at his farm. Family farm would be sufficient. That sentence in general can also be reformatted. I recommend: As a child, he lived on his family's farm named "Clifton Hills" in the Upper Burnett area of Queensland, often helping to tend livestock and produce.

This sentence could be reformatted: Due to an absence of high schools in his rural area, for his postprimary education Anderson traveled to Brisbane to attend Brisbane Grammar School. I recommend: An absence of high schools near his rural home necessitated Anderson to travel to Brisbane for post-primary education at Brisbane Grammar School.

List selected publications more cleanly and less like cited references. Example: Name N. (Year). Title. Location: Publication. ISBN Serial Number.

Anderson's career is well documented. However, the sources used for his early life at his family farm and personal life are difficult to access and verify. (Marquis Who's Who)

This article seems to covers Mr. Anderson fairly well with what information is available about him.

Links to other articles could be improved however. Specifically Risk. There is Risk Theory, Risk Assessment, and many other articles discussing a form of risk. Is there a more specific article that can be linked to?

This article needs an image of Mr. Anderson for the main infobox. Also an image of the cover of one of his publications would be excellent to have as well.

This has the potential to be a strong candidate for GA status. It just needs a little more work. Keep it up! JoeMeas (talk) 06:04, 28 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]

The nominator's gone, so closing the review. Wizardman 18:00, 30 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]