Talk:Joany Badenhorst/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 23:18, 13 April 2014 (UTC)

I'll take up this review as part of the chain of Paralympians submitted in past few days. I mainly focus on copy editing issues. Given the size of these articles the GAR itself should not take too long so I will leave down some initial comments on these articles within 48 hours. I'm sorry if I'm reviewing too many of your articles, Hawkeye! ☠ Jaguar ☠ 23:18, 13 April 2014 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

1. Is it reasonably well written?

   A. Prose quality:

   B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:

2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?

   A. References to sources:

   It is well referenced.

   B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:

   C. No original research:

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. Major aspects:

   B. Focused:

4. Is it neutral?

   Fair representation without bias:

5. Is it stable?

   No edit wars, etc:

6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?

   A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:

   B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:

7. Overall:

   Pass or Fail:

Wow. She's not that much older than me!

Hawkeye7 (talk) 03:14, 26 April 2014 (UTC)

Initial comments

Lead

• "Joany Badenhorst (born 10 August 1994) Australian Paralympian who was selected to compete..." - this doesn't make sense. Is this lead missing a "is a"? Joany Badenhorst (born 10 August 1994) is a Australian Paralympian who was selected to compete
  • Y Yes. Corrected. Hawkeye7 (talk) 03:14, 26 April 2014 (UTC)

Career

• "After the accident, she was fitted with a prosthetic leg and came second in the school 100 metres event" - what school event?
  • Y The 100 metres event! Linked. Hawkeye7 (talk) 03:14, 26 April 2014 (UTC)
• "She narrowly missed qualifying for the Australian athletics team for the 2012 London Games" - why did she not qualify for the London Olympics? And is this referring to the 2012 Summer Oympic games or the 2012 Summer Paralympic games?
  • Y Paralympic Games. Linked. Did not qualify because her time was not fast enough. By coincidence, Peter Higgins approached me in London and asked if I'd work on the Winter Paralympian articles. Which is why we're here now. Hawkeye7 (talk) 03:14, 26 April 2014 (UTC)

On hold

The reason why this review is so short is because I corrected a couple of minor grammar/syntax problems in the Personal and Career sections. If those remaining points above can be addressed, then this article could pass the GAN. I've done my usual check of these Paralympian articles so I won't repeat myself! I'll put this on hold for a week. This is also the last Australian Paralmypian to be reviewed! ☠ Jaguar ☠ 21:04, 25 April 2014 (UTC)

• All points addressed. Hawkeye7 (talk) 03:14, 26 April 2014 (UTC)

Close - promoted

I'll keep these brief. All issues addressed. The article now meets the GA criteria. This is also the last one to be promoted. Well done! ☠ Jaguar ☠ 21:30, 26 April 2014 (UTC)