Talk:Joanne (album)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 09:10, 18 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

"stripped-down" soft rock and dance-pop stylings → I would rather say "genres" than "stylings"
Please recall the same genres as in the infobox
The album's art marked → "nature" seems a better choice than "art" talking about the album cover, therefore "art"
consisting mainly → other way around no - adverb, mainly, follows verb
The singer's experience working → she acted rather than worked there she "worked" on the series, unnecessary change, sommon terminology
and reached number one in France while "Million Reasons" → comma before "while" not when you mean at the same time
which began on August 1, 2017, and ended on February 1, 2018 → no need to be that exact in the lead; shorten to: "which began in August 2017 and ended in February 2018"
as well as the top ten in over 25 countries → as well as reached the top ten in over 25 countries
Two of its singles, "Million Reasons" and "Joanne" → comma after "Joanne" unnecessary
Many articles noted the impact of the album on the musical endeavors of artists like Kylie Minogue → simplify: "Many observers noted the impact of the album on artists like..." surely the impact is seen in their works? - therefore "endeavors" works Just some thoughts. Twofingered Typist (talk) 20:01, 25 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox

No issues

Background and development

By June 2014 she and new → comma before "she" not really necessary
Link "jazz"
At the awards ceremony the singer → comma before "the singer" unnecessary
and was working on the logistics and aspects like the look → replace "like" with "including"
Gaga teased fans about the album's creative → Gaga teased the album's creative no -she teased her fans about two aspects - its creation & recording
Link "social media"

Writing and recording

at a London studio → at a studio in London
and then proceeded with the song → ...songs since we're talking about an overall process
He said later → He later said

Release

fans found that if they instructed it to "Play →→ fans found that if they instructed it to "play
No other issues here

Title and packaging

The booklet in her debut album, The Fame (2008), contained a poem titled For a Moment by Joanne → is this poem for or about Joanne? 'Cause it isn't clear the way it's written now.
Unlink the song "Joanne", as mentioned before
It consists of an image of the left profile of the singer wearing a pink → It consists of an image of the singer's left profile, with her wearing a pink
She added "Gaga was → comma before the quote
standard version, 14 songs on the deluxe → standard version, while 14 songs are featured on the deluxe edition

Themes and influences

as well as their lyrics → as well as to their lyrics
feelings like loss → replace "like" with "such as"
The singer's experience working on American Horror Story → same as in the lead
Being on the show also affected her vocals → "affected" means it had a negative impact; is that what you want to say? In what way?
"mask" should be in quotes

Music and lyrics

In an interview with Rolling Stone Gaga → comma after "Rolling Stone"
The next track is electronic. "John Wayne" → The electronic "John Wayne"
Link "cowboy"
a spoken word → a spoken-word
Link "masturbation"
Release year of "Alejandro" in brackets
autotune → Auto-Tune
and is a representation of country music with R&B and pop → and is a mixture of country music, R&B and pop
her man to love her as she is → her man to love her true self
and bouncy drum rhythm → "bouncy" is quite unencyclopedic
The song has biblical references with Gaga alluding → comma before "with"
Link "downtempo"
a downtempo funk production behind Gaga and Welch's → a downtempo funk production to accompany Gaga and Welch's
Link "breast cancer"
Sample > An 18 second → An 18-second
Sample > which illustrates the chorus of the song. The track presents a guitar-and-vocal breakdown, as well is a mixture of guitar and "grumbling" synths

Promotion

Unlink "Perfect Illusion"
Unlink "A-Yo" and "Million Reasons"
and on Alan Carr's Happy Hour → as well as on Alan Carr's Happy Hour
where along with her biggest hits → unencyclopedic; replace with: "where along with past material"
on October 5, 20 and 27 → also mention the year
which was released for streaming → with the latter subsequently released for streaming
Link "lead single"
This was followed later → no need for the "later" since it's self-explainatory
Link "promotional singles"
"A-Yo" was initially chosen as the second single of the album, but "Million Reasons" proved to be more successful commercially and was released as a single first. → How is this backed up by the source given?
the chart at number four becoming her → comma before "becoming"
Link "Digital Songs Chart"

Critical reception

four-out-of-five-star rating, in his review → no comma needed
Great work here otherwise

Commercial performance

It was 2016's second highest debut →It was 2016's second-highest debut
so fell to number five → with it falling to number five
had the third highest → had the third-highest
the album was certified gold by Music Canada → the album was certified Gold by Music Canada
Like the United States → Like in the United States
524 percent → 524-percent
with first week sales of 26,694 copies → with first-week sales of 26,694 copies
The Australian Recording Industry Association said → The Australian Recording Industry Association reported

Recognition and impact

Joanne made several publications' year-end lists → Joanne was ranked in several publications' year-end lists
32nd best album of 2016 → 32nd-best album of 2016
20th best album of the year → as above
Many articles noted Gaga's minimalist → replace with "observers" since the articles can't think on ther own
Gary Trust in an article for Billboard → comma after "Trust"

Other sections

No issues, tables formatted correctly

Other things

45.1% is a bit high for copyviolation
No disambiguation links
No dead links... Congrats!
As far as I've checked them, the references do seem to back up the assertions made in this article

Outcome

On hold for 7 days — A surprisingly good read. Some issues do need to be fixed for GA status. Good luck with editing; Cartoon network freak (talk) 08:07, 24 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]
IndianBio, Wanted to make sure this is still on your radar. ---Another Believer _(Talk) 14:32, 4 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

@IndianBio: Note it's been for over a month on hold now. You'll have to start working on it or otherwise I will sadly have to fail this. Greets; Cartoon network freak (talk) 20:01, 27 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

@Cartoon network freak: IB hasn't been around for four weeks. I'd recommend proceeding to fail. If they were around, I'd have cut them some slack, but I've seen this happen before. They disappear for long periods. dannymusiceditor ^oops 00:55, 30 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Failing due to inactivity. Cartoon network freak (talk) 04:58, 31 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

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