Talk:Jim Savage

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Hannah Legacy- Review

Hello. I think that this is a great article so far. The additions to Savage's early life, the Mariposa War, and the discovery of Yosemite Valley are great contributions to understanding who Jim Savage was and what he did or may not have done. The section on discrepancies as "discover" of Yosemite seems to be a very important section and should be highlighted in this article. Adding the travel diary helped to do this. The critics that I have would be to add to his last years and to his portrayal in the media if at all possible. Overall, this is great work and I believe that this is a fantastic article on Jim Savage. -Hannah Legacy — Preceding unsigned comment added by Hklegacy (talk • contribs) 18:31, 10 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Hanna Review Response

Thank you for your feedback Hannah. I do agree that I need to bolster the information about Savage's last years. His death, while unceremonious, is an interesting one which warrants further investigation and elaboration. I will update the article accordingly in the coming days ahead. Thanks Hannah! Sklai.cpp (talk) 21:38, 17 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]

RTV Feedback

This is excellent - nice additions, really fleshing out Savage's life, context, and source materials. I especially like the attention to contests over what is known about him (birthdate, "discovery").

A few ideas for edits are as follows: - Clarify "Sierra Nevada mountains" rather than "Sierras." - The "married several daughters" is fascinating! Is more information available about the process? Was thi a diplomatic move or economic alliance? When he traveled with "several female Indians" later, are these his wives? - Regarding the conflict with Jose-Juarez (is this a last name?), what evidence is there about the feelings or motives they had? If so, give it--or at least cite the source you're drawing from within the text to indicate that they should have some evidence on that. "According to Mitchell, ..." Similarly, what is the context for the Jose-Juarez quote? Did he write that? Say that according to Mitchell? Where did it come from? - You then go on to talk about attack by "Indians" and "their chief" -- who are these people? Do we know which California Indians at least? - At "In pursuit of the outlaw," start a new paragraph to differentiate the question of Yosemite. It seems so weird to care which non-indigenous person "found" Yosemite if it's not directly related to disseminating the information at the very least--is there some sense of that side of things? (That might be too much to track.) - Are there any images of him? Including an image of Yosemite Valley or Bridalveil Falls might be useful?

Proofreading-wise, I suggest doing one more read through for longer sentences; passive voice constructions; John McDougall should have a comma after his name, and I would reword "There are indicators ..." (awk).

Frankly though, this is impressive. Nicely done! Raevan2011 (talk) 06:46, 28 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]

James D Savage.

members of his family are eligible for Mayflower Society. for more info you can contact me mypixiepap@yahoo.com. 68.187.196.183 (talk) 19:22, 28 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]