Talk:Jim Cullivan/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: WikiOriginal-9 (talk · contribs) 08:47, 22 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Notes

Added guards, us army ww2, uni of indiana and appalachian uni faculty cats
Grove High Schhol isn't linked but is this it or no?
- Looks like it - linked.
Spell our and link us army.
- Done.
"returned to his alma mater" Given that his prev coaching job was at a high school it is not obvious that "alma mater" refers to murray state so i suggest just saying alma mater murray state or something.
- Changed.
"When Murray State head coach" once you adjust the previous sentence, remove murray state from this
- Done.
"Grove High School, where he attended from 1938–1941" early lif section didn't say that. Suggeest moving it there removing it from the coaching section
- Not sure where I got that - removed the dates as I can't find the source.
"While there he" comma after there
- Added.
"undefeated years, and seven" remove comma
- Done.
"He coached them for one year, and retired" remove comma
- Done.
any more info on his UPFL stint?
- Didn't find any - league seems pretty obscure.
"being named assistant at Fulton High School in Kentucky" add in 1949
- Done.
"was signed by Grove High School" in 1966
- Done.
"Guilford Quakers as defensive line coach" in 1978
- Done.
Some of the high schools he coached don't have articles so i dont know where they are.
- Would you like me to try to find their locations?
  - if it's not too much work WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 02:26, 27 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]
    - Added them. BeanieFan11 (talk) 02:46, 27 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]
in the lead, "coaching career that spanned over 40 seasons" thats not true
- 1949-1990 is 42 seasons, right?
  - there are a few gaps i think. WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 02:24, 27 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]
    - @WikiOriginal-9: That's right, but I'm saying it spanned over 40 years, not that he coached all 40. BeanieFan11 (talk) 02:46, 27 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]
      - ok, can you change seasons to years WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 02:48, 27 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]
        @WikiOriginal-9: Changed. BeanieFan11 (talk) 02:49, 27 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

I think that's all. WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 08:47, 22 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

@WikiOriginal-9: BeanieFan11 (talk) 02:17, 27 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Everything is done except the following: "He coached them for one year and retired in 1991 at the age of 71, after a brief stint in the United Professional Football League (UPFL)." I dont see in the source where it says he retired in 1991? Also where did u get 1990 from for UPFL in the infobox? WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 05:55, 27 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

@WikiOriginal-9: Changed it to Cullivan left the school in 1989 to become an assistant coach for Tennessee Wesleyan. After a stint with them, he had a short stay with a team in the United Professional Football League (UPFL) before retiring. I also put "c. 1990" in the infobox as it was probably around that time - I can remove it if you want. BeanieFan11 (talk) 15:55, 27 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

All points have been addressed. Passing the article. Nice work! WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 16:35, 27 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]