Talk:Jerry Estrada/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 20:22, 1 February 2019 (UTC)[reply]

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

"(full name, Gerardo Hernández Estrada; born January 10, 1958, Monclova, Coahuila) Mexico" - I think the Mexico bit can be removed from this piece of text since it has been established he is Mexican soon after
"he has portrayed a rudo (heel, those that portray the bad guys) character, " - should be either renamed as villains or put bad guys in quotation marks
"He was originally active from 1978 until 2003 where he was forced to retire due to due chronic injuries caused by his signature bumps to the outside the ring." - when he was forced to retire due to chronic injures caused by his signature bumps outside the ring.
"CMLL World Light Heavyweight Championship, Mexican National Middleweight Championship as well as" - the CMLL World Light Heavyweight Championship, the Mexican National Middleweight Championship

"While recovering Estrada worked to support himself by selling chewing gum, polishing shoes, as a line chef and driving trucks." - selling chewing gum, polishing shoes, driving tracks and working as a line chef.

"he would receive further training, especially in the early parts of his career by Rafael Salamanca," - better and shorter he received further training early in his career
"In an interview Estrada from around his 2003 retirement, " - with Estrada
"He slowly developed a "rock and roll" style in-ring character, inspired by various bands of the early to mid-1980s." - various early to mid-1980s bands.
"a nickname that has stuck with Estrada throughout his career, even led to Estrada walking to the ring with a living Puma on a couple of occasions." - rewrite the text in bold so it reads as follows: a nickname Estrada had throughout his career. It led Estrada to sporadically walk to the ring with a living Puma.

"but the show was canceled due to the Mexico City earthquake the day before." - it was
"as part of EMLL's emerging Trios division." - its
"who bore quite a physical resemblance to Estrada himself and wrestled a similar style." - who heavily physically resembled Estrada and had a similar wrestling style.
"the conservative booking style of EMLL kept the regular-sized wrestlers" - the EMLL's conservative booking style

" Estrada was one of the first CMLL wrestlers to leave to go to AAA," - and join
", but for unrevealed reasons" - , but for undisclosed reasons,
"a joint AAA/World Championship Wrestling (WCW) pay-per-view where he teamed with La Parka and Blue Panther," - , where he paired with La Parka and Blue Panther,
Wikilink Undercard to Card (sports)
"and Arandu lost to Latin Lover, Sergio Romo, Jr.," - the text in should omit the comma per MOS:JR
"AA began a working relationship with the North American-based World Wrestling Federations (WWF)" - Federation

"During this time he also worked several tours for the Puerto Rico based World Wrestling Council (WWC)" - , he additionally worked several tours for the Puerto Rico-based World Wrestling Council (WWC),
"that also includedPierroth, Rico Suave and Villano III." - a space is needed between the words "included" and "Pierroth"

"A month later Estrada faced the masked Espectro Jr. in a Lucha de Apuestas that Estrada won" - Lucha de Apuestas event that Estrada won.
"and, as a result, Espectro Jr. removed the wig" - better; As a consequence, Espectro Jr. removed the wig

"Later that year a Monterrey wrestling promotion known as Poder y Honor held another benefit show for Jerry Estrada, honoring him during the show." - held a second benefit show to honor Jerry Estrada.
"losing his retirement match to the team of Perro Aguayo, Jr.," - the text in bold should be written as Perro Aguayo Jr. per MOS:JR
"in what was billed as his "retirement match." - the closing quotation marks is missing from the wording in bold

Estrada's claim to the IWAS Tag Team Championship with Juventud Guerrera needs to be cited to a reliable source

The third to last row in the record table needs to be cited to a reliable source

These were all the points that came up during my read-through. The review is going to be put on hold. MWright96 (talk) 15:53, 2 February 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Combined 13 and 20 it is the same one. I am looking for my copy to find the ISBN, may be packed away in the attic, not sure.MPJ-DK (talk) 22:52, 2 February 2019 (UTC)[reply]
There is no author for 40 (well 39 now) it is listed as "EDITORIAL MEDIOTIEMPO". MPJ-DK (talk) 22:54, 2 February 2019 (UTC)[reply]
- I believe I have addressed all issues, thank you. MPJ-DK (talk) 23:15, 2 February 2019 (UTC)[reply]
MWright96 - I believe I have addressed all issues brought up in the review. MPJ-DK (talk) 07:58, 6 February 2019 (UTC)[reply]
- @MPJ-DK: Passing for GA. MWright96 (talk) 21:08, 6 February 2019 (UTC)[reply]