Talk:Jerry's Painting/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Queenieacoustic (talk) 21:05, 5 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Will review this tomorrow. Queenieacoustic (talk) 21:05, 5 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

Plot

...while thinking of about powerful women... Drop "of" or "about".
- Done. — Hun ter Ka hn 14:41, 6 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Production

"Jerry's Painting" was written by Norm Hiscock and directed by Dean Holland. During its original broadcast, "Jerry's Painting" ran for... Start the second sentence with "the episode" instead.
- Done. — Hun ter Ka hn 14:41, 6 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]
"Jerry's Painting" featured a guest appearance by Darlene Hunt as Marcia Langman, a member of the conservative group, the Society for Family Stability Foundation. Drop the second comma.
- Dropped it. — Hun ter Ka hn 14:41, 6 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Remember to write (pictured) after the name of the person in the picture.
- Added. — Hun ter Ka hn 14:41, 6 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Cultural references

...Andy and April instead start to purchase several "as seen on TV", including... Looks like a noun is missing after "as seen on TV", unless that is the noun?
- Nope, you're right. Added "items". — Hun ter Ka hn 14:41, 6 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Reception

You should probably explain what the "ratings" and "shares" mean, for those who are not familiar with Nielsen ratings.
- Added. — Hun ter Ka hn 14:41, 6 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Why Leslie Knope mentioned by full name in the middle of the section?
- Not sure. Dropped the last name. — Hun ter Ka hn 14:41, 6 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

""Jerry's Painting" is the eleventh episode of the third season of the American comedy television series Parks and Recreation..." Write "Parks and Recreation's third season" instead.
- Done. — Hun ter Ka hn 14:41, 6 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]

With not much at all to complain about, this is overall a very well-written article. Just fix said issues and we've got ourselves another GA. I'll put it on hold for seven days so that the changes can be made. Queenieacoustic (talk) 09:08, 6 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the review! Much appreciated! — Hun ter Ka hn 14:41, 6 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Looks good. Well done! Queenieacoustic (talk) 14:53, 6 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]