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Reviewer: TBrandley (talk · contribs) 04:57, 6 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I'm always up for a geography lesson! I'm reviewing! TBrandley (what's up) 04:57, 6 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

  • "Location in Yavapai County and the state of Arizona" link the county in the caption
Done. --Another Believer (Talk) 17:22, 13 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • Per WP:LEADLENGTH, the lead seems to have too many paragraphs, for an article of this size, I would only suggest three.
Reduced to three paragraphs. Finetooth (talk) 17:44, 15 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks, FT! --Another Believer (Talk) 17:48, 15 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Education, government" should be changed to "Education and government"
Done. --Another Believer (Talk) 17:22, 13 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Added a paragraph about snow, fog, and wind. Finetooth (talk) 18:32, 15 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

There is more to come later, those are some opening comments. TBrandley (what's up) 18:04, 12 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

With FT's assistance, I believe your initial concerns have been addressed. Please let us know if you have any others. Thanks! --Another Believer (Talk) 23:37, 15 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I have further comments:

  • Link "2010 census" per WP:UNDERLINK in the lead
  • Would suggest adding the "United States" portal

Those are the only, quick concerns I have right now, very good job writing this article indeed! TBrandley (what's up) 09:08, 26 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you. I made both changes just now. Would the Arizona portal be better than the United States portal? Finetooth (talk) 18:03, 26 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Added Untied States portal to portal bar, which also links to the Arizona portal. --Another Believer (Talk) 19:06, 26 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Ah, thanks. I overlooked the portal bar. Finetooth (talk) 20:31, 26 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
No problem! --Another Believer (Talk) 01:41, 27 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
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