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Reviewer: Dunkleosteus77 (talk · contribs) 20:02, 2 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]


Comments by Dunkleosteus77

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Added sections on both of these. Chiswick Chap (talk) 15:07, 3 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]
It's mentioned in the second sentence. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 10:50, 3 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Done all the ones I noticed. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 06:29, 3 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Removed. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 10:50, 3 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 10:50, 3 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 10:50, 3 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 06:29, 3 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 06:29, 3 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 06:29, 3 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 10:50, 3 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Done where appropriate. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 10:50, 3 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for taking on this review. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 06:29, 3 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]

More comments

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Or 3 days later   User:Dunkleosteus77 |push to talk  17:28, 7 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Fixed. I always hope to slip in an 'is comprised of' to trigger a bit of AWB in such instances ;-} Chiswick Chap (talk) 18:20, 7 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Glossed. Chiswick Chap (talk) 07:43, 8 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Done. Chiswick Chap (talk) 18:19, 7 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • wikilink septa
Done. Chiswick Chap (talk) 18:06, 7 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 09:39, 8 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]
I tried moving the Anatomy section to before the Taxonomy section and that had its disadvantages too. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 09:39, 8 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]
No I mean move the last 2 paragraphs in Anatomy to the top   User:Dunkleosteus77 |push to talk  18:53, 8 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Added. Chiswick Chap (talk) 18:16, 7 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Done. Chiswick Chap (talk) 18:01, 7 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Called it 'Largest and smallest' which seems to describe its function and content well. Within that scope it seems well focussed, i.e. some forms are small but only short-lived, etc. Chiswick Chap (talk) 18:28, 7 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Done. Chiswick Chap (talk) 07:39, 8 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Up with which we will not put! Chiswick Chap (talk) 07:41, 8 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]
It's archived inside the ref. Chiswick Chap (talk) 18:08, 7 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Fixed. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 09:39, 8 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Also, use true jellyfish   User:Dunkleosteus77 |push to talk  18:53, 8 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]
The term is already mentioned as a gloss for Scyphozoa in the tree and in the taxonomy section, which should be sufficient.
Glossed. Chiswick Chap (talk) 07:38, 8 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • You wikilink fission on second mention
WL first instance. Chiswick Chap (talk) 17:57, 7 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Fixed, I think. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 09:39, 8 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Fixed. Chiswick Chap (talk) 18:12, 7 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Fixed. Chiswick Chap (talk) 18:25, 7 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Gone. Chiswick Chap (talk) 17:58, 7 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]
It's accurate, explains something very surprising, and shows what needs to be shown. Not sure what else a science diagram should be, really. We can say "vertical section through the bell" or "sagittal section" if that would help. Chiswick Chap (talk) 19:08, 8 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]
No I mean aesthetically, but it’s not a problem for GA   User:Dunkleosteus77 |push to talk  21:41, 8 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]
I've tarted it up a little.

Even more comments

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Not sure what that might be referring to. We've mentioned Craspedacusta sowerbii which turned up in a canal in England (from China) recently. Chiswick Chap (talk) 19:08, 8 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Looking it up, I was thinking of Jellyfish Lake   User:Dunkleosteus77 |push to talk  21:41, 8 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Added. Chiswick Chap (talk) 00:24, 9 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Meant for you to put that in the Diet section   User:Dunkleosteus77 |push to talk  16:52, 11 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]
???
You say all jellyfish are carnivorous and then there’s this one that’s not   User:Dunkleosteus77 |push to talk  18:48, 11 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Mastigias eats plankton, so it's not an exception.
Being omnivorous, the statement “jellyfish are carnivorous,” implying all are, is false   User:Dunkleosteus77 |push to talk  01:35, 12 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Well an impeccable source boldly uses "All", actually. The point is that the stinging cells paralyse or kill wriggly animals, which are their prey. Brusca, Richard (2016). Invertebrates. Sinauer Associates. p. 296. ISBN 978-1-60535-375-3. All cnidarians are carnivores (or parasites). Typically, nematocyst-laden feeding tentacles capture animal prey and carry it to the mouth region where it is ingested whole. Chiswick Chap (talk) 08:27, 12 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]
In any case you need to bring up that there is an omnivorous jellyfish because it is notable and related to Diet   User:Dunkleosteus77 |push to talk  13:32, 12 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Mentioned in Diet section. Chiswick Chap (talk) 13:42, 12 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]
spotted jellyfish from jellyfish lake in a symbiotic relationship with some algae   User:Dunkleosteus77 |push to talk  14:58, 12 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Oh is that what you wanted. Added to Diet section.
Not a problem.
Fixed.
Cut.
Rearranged paragraph. The connection is that jellyfish prevent fish stocks from recovering, by eating their young and competing for food, so once fish numbers go down, they won't come back up. Hope that's clear now.
Reworded.
Data records; larger circles mean those with higher certainty. Added to legend.
Cut.
Cut down repeat mentions of blooming; merged Population, Jelly-fall, Dead zone sections into Blooms.
Fixed.
Fixed.
Above the file description is a section called SCOP Lineage, which says it's Green Fluorescent Protein, as the caption already says.
Fixed.

References

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All fixed, we think.
Done, I think. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 19:41, 13 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]
It was alive at 18:08 on 13 October 2018. It's also in the web archive https://web.archive.org/web/20180324085114/http://eol.org/info/442.
Unnecessary, given ref 10 - let's delete it at the end to avoid messing up all your numbers below.
Now deleted! Cwmhiraeth (talk) 19:41, 13 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]
doi present, no PMC or PMID as far as I can see. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 19:36, 13 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]
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I thought secondary sources were favoured over primary sources. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 18:58, 13 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Journal articles are preferred over news articles   User:Dunkleosteus77 |push to talk  21:32, 13 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Added ref to paper by Hays on ocean currents and marine life.
Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 18:58, 13 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 18:58, 13 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Gone.
  • ref no 100 date given inconsistently
Fixed.
Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 18:58, 13 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 18:58, 13 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]
GA is the goal, but really the question is off-limits. Chiswick Chap (talk) 16:49, 13 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]