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Reviewer: TonyTheTiger (talk · contribs) 23:13, 10 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

WP:LEAD
✓ Done. Re-sequenced in chronological order. Aditya(talk • contribs) 10:34, 19 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Check, please. I have made some changes to the lede. Aditya(talk • contribs) 12:30, 15 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Early life
✓ Done. Removed. Aditya(talk • contribs) 10:34, 19 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
✓ Done. Removed. Aditya(talk • contribs) 10:34, 19 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
✓ Done. Info added. Aditya(talk • contribs) 10:34, 19 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Can you cite the kitchen table.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 16:01, 19 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
✓ Done. Aditya(talk • contribs) 15:41, 21 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Thoroughly reworked. I hope all the issues are addressed now, including some that I noticed. Aditya(talk • contribs) 08:34, 16 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Mid-1950s
Done. Aditya(talk • contribs) 09:28, 15 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Late 1950s
✓ Done. Corrected info. Aditya(talk • contribs) 10:34, 19 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Kiss Them for Me was a box office disappointment and would prove to be Mansfield's final starring role in a mainstream Hollywood studio film." and "The Sheriff of Fractured Jaw was a success; it was her last mainstream successful film." are very similar statements. Are they both correct?--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 05:55, 14 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
✓ Done. Corrected info. Aditya(talk • contribs) 10:34, 19 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Stage work
Synergistic style now. Aditya(talk • contribs) 11:49, 19 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
I don't know what you mean.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 16:07, 19 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Striking the comment does not help me understand your progress on this subject.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 16:17, 21 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
✓. Throughout the text it now reads .", ,", and "?. Done in consultation with MOS:LQ. Aditya(talk • contribs) 04:49, 22 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
I think you have got this right now. If this goes to WP:FAC we will find out.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 06:12, 22 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
✓ Done. Along with the rest of the article. Aditya(talk • contribs) 10:34, 19 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Done, apart from linking Rock Hunter. The two links are so far apart that one hardly can remember it was linked earlier. Also, didn't understand the second point. Aditya(talk • contribs) 09:28, 15 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Recordings
✓ Done. All available wikibios linked. Aditya(talk • contribs) 11:49, 19 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
✓ Done. Wikilinked. Aditya(talk • contribs) 10:34, 19 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Done. Still working on names of critics. Aditya(talk • contribs) 12:38, 15 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Television
✓ Done. Aditya(talk • contribs) 11:53, 19 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks. All issues are addressable. Can I have a few days time to work on them? Aditya(talk • contribs) 05:51, 15 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • I am still working through the article. I am not nearly done. You can see my comments are by section. You should be able to tell how far along I am. Feel free to start addressing concerns. Respond beneath each individual concern. I will strike as they are resolved once I have finished going through the article.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 06:37, 15 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Personal life
✓ Done. Ref added. Aditya(talk • contribs) 10:34, 19 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
First marriage
✓ Done. Aditya(talk • contribs) 10:34, 19 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
✓ Done. Aditya(talk • contribs) 10:34, 19 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
✓ Done. Aditya(talk • contribs) 10:34, 19 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Second marriage
✓ Done. Aditya(talk • contribs) 10:34, 19 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
✓ Done. Re-sequenced in chronological order. Aditya(talk • contribs) 10:34, 19 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Legacy
✓ Done. Aditya(talk • contribs) 10:34, 19 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Can you convert to millions of dollars ($X.X million in 2012 dollars) instead of to dollars.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 16:33, 19 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
✓ Done. Converted to millions of dollars. Aditya(talk • contribs) 10:21, 22 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
A few more days for the text is all I require. Aditya(talk • contribs) 13:27, 17 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Images
✓ Done. Aditya(talk • contribs) 11:49, 19 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
✓ Done. Removed and notified. Aditya(talk • contribs) 04:49, 22 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
✓ Done. Aditya(talk • contribs) 11:49, 19 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
✓ Done. Aditya(talk • contribs) 11:49, 19 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
✓ Done. Aditya(talk • contribs) 11:49, 19 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Getting to the images might take slightly more time, as these images were uploaded, discussed ad valideted by other editors. Alternatively, do you think I can take them to some forum and have them checked? Aditya(talk • contribs) 13:27, 17 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Only the second one needs a review. Try Wikipedia:Non-free content review or Wikipedia:Copyright problems.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 15:07, 17 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
✓ Done. But, are you sure you need that for published works of art? Aditya(talk • contribs) 10:18, 22 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Not sure.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 14:57, 22 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Great editorial work. You may want to try to move a few images over to the left for variety while keeping in mind the accessibility rules about not doing so directly under level three headers or higher. Other than that, I am quite satisfied. I am going to PASS this article now.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 14:57, 22 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
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