Talk:Jane Aitken/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 07:20, 13 September 2021 (UTC)

Comments

• "with several Scottish families in 1771. " several compatriots in?
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• Link Philadelphia.
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• Link bookbinding.
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• "She printed and bound about 400 volumes" repetitive, perhaps just follow on from the previous

sentence, like "and about 400 volumes..."

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• "Christian Bible" is there another notable Bible other than the Christian one?
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• Death inline references not needed in the infobox, they can go in the prose.
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• Usually talk about her mother/father before her siblings.
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• Link bookbinder again in the main body.
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• "which she ran at North Third Street" what happened to the other place?
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• "which is 500 feet " was, and convert.
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• "Then in 1808 her " -> "The following year, ..."
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• "from notes he had signed for" from notes for which he had signed. And what are these "notes"?
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• "54,258" reduce that precision to nearest $1000.
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• "known as Miss Jane Aitken.[1]" no need for italics.
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• "than the actual printing" no need for "actual".
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• "shows similarity to her binding work from 1802 to 1812 and shows that perhaps" shows shows... and this feels speculative. Who is making this connection, it's not Wikipedia.
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• "She was advertising" She advertised.
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• " friend of hers" friend of Aitken
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• "equipment was sold off" no need for "off".
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• "20 miles " convert.
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• Works - convert this to a gallery like I did in one of your other articles and utilise the caption option instead of "Some of her other works were -"...
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• "of the Christian Bible" okay so maybe there are other notable Bibles! But you link that here, but not in the lead.
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• "most important book she produced during" which "she"?
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• "Other early businesswomen in contention" not sure this is really relevant to the article.
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• "1820-1900" endash.
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That's all I have for today. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 11:43, 17 September 2021 (UTC)

Thanks for review. I'll get started on it.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 12:43, 17 September 2021 (UTC)

@The Rambling Man: All issues have been addressed. Can you take another loook. Thanks.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:58, 17 September 2021 (UTC)