Talk:Jamie Kalven/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MyCatIsAChonk (talk · contribs) 12:32, 4 August 2023 (UTC)

Saw this on DYK, seems like a very interesting person. Happy to review! MyCatIsAChonk (talk) (not me) (also not me) (still no) 12:32, 4 August 2023 (UTC)

Edge3, I've completed my review, just some small things about the prose and then this article is good to go. Nice job! MyCatIsAChonk (talk) (not me) (also not me) (still no) 13:30, 4 August 2023 (UTC)

I see you've implemented my suggestions, thank you- good to go for GA! MyCatIsAChonk (talk) (not me) (also not me) (still no) 22:19, 5 August 2023 (UTC)

Rate	Attribute	Review Comment
1. Well-written:
	1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.	Kalven grew up in Kenwood neighborhood... - "the" is needed before "Kenwood" Afterwards he graduated from Wesleyan University. - comma after "afterwards" Harry died in 1974... - I'd replace harry with "His father", or add a clarification ("Harry, his father, died..."), because it could cause confusion for a skimming reader ...his wife Evans was beaten... - again, clarification would be helpful. Perhaps, "...his wife, Patricia Evans, was beaten..." The "Invisible Institute" was a fictitious name for the blog's publisher. - might just be me, but I'm not entirely sure what this means. What exactly does "fictitious name" mean? In June 2005, counsel for the city... - missing "the" Everytime "FOIA" is stated as a subject or object, it must be preceded with "the". When the FOIA itself is not the object/subject (like in "FOIA requests") "the" is not needed Prose is clear and free of typos.
	1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.	Add Template:Use American English or otherwise appropriate All the templates and whatnot under "Works" should have "none" placed under the ref parameter Complies with MoS standards- no fiction or words to watch are present, lead is well-written.
2. Verifiable with no original research:
	2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.	Citations are placed under a proper "References" section
	2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).	All citations are to news sites or official documents (like court cases)- all reliable.
	2c. it contains no original research.	I did some random checks on some possibly contentious statements, all came up clear.
	2d. it contains no copyright violations or plagiarism.	Earwig shows a relatively high score for some- the highest score is to a source licensed under CC, and the citation states that some material is taken from the site, so that's all good. The other high score is for the Chicago magazine source, but most of the highlights are for long names or otherwise simple statements like "A Worthy Tradition: Freedom of Speech in America". No copyvios/plagiarism.
3. Broad in its coverage:
	3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.	Addresses his personal life and the major events in his career- all good.
	3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).	Stays focused throughout.
	4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.	Article stays neutral throughout, particularly in discussions of the various court cases.
	5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.	No edit warring.
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
	6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content.	Images are properly CC/PD tagged.
	6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.	Images are relevant and properly captioned.
	7. Overall assessment.

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