Talk:James van Riemsdyk/GA1

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Reviewer: HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk · contribs) 04:13, 21 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]

I think you can expand on his impact as a rookie beyond the team (see [1])
- Added — Ghost River 17:08, 29 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]
He was kind of in the race for the Calder [2], earning 3 votes [3].
- Added — Ghost River 17:08, 29 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]
- LOL, imagine coming back from a 3–0 deficit. Couldn't be the Leafs.
  - This is Philly! We get it done, but we never make it easy! — Ghost River 17:08, 29 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]
I imagine the "kid line" is because of their youth but I think it can be explained a bit. Maybe alongside young forwards Brayden Schenn and Jakub Voráček
- Added — Ghost River 17:08, 29 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]

I think you can expand a bit on the trade with Schenn. Per this, he was part of trade rumors during the offseason/throughout the year.
- Added — Ghost River 17:08, 29 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]
WL plus-minus
- Done — Ghost River 17:08, 29 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]
In the fourth paragraph, you WL Kadri and Komarov even though they were WL in the first paragraph
- Removed — Ghost River 17:08, 29 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]

took a puck to the leg from the Colorado Avalanche, this seems awkwardly worded to me. It should say during a game against the Colorado Avalanche or even name the specific player.
- Fixed — Ghost River 17:08, 29 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Maybe WL to 2020_Stanley_Cup_playoffs#Host_cities to explain the "bubble."
- Done — Ghost River 17:08, 29 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Please WL List of 2020–21 NHL Three Star Awards for He was named the NHL East Division Star of the Month for January 2021.
- Done — Ghost River 17:08, 29 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]

The sentence about the "kid line" is kind of a run-on. As well, you should take out which because it doesn't make sense with the sentence.
- Fixed How does it look now?
Can you please add a hyphen in hat trick to bypass the redirect?
- Done
For the Athletic sources that are hidden behind a paywall, please follow Template:Closed access
- Done Used "url-access=subscription", as recommended by the template
Why do you need two different sources (one in the body and one in the chart) for the Hockey East All-Rookie Team? Can you not use the same one?
- Fixed
Can you please change Calder Trophy to Calder Memorial Trophy to bypass the redirect?
- Fixed
Please WL the first mention of The Morning Call in work
- Done

GhostRiver, this should do it

HickoryOughtShirt?4 All done! Thanks for taking look at such a large article! — Ghost River 00:11, 30 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]

GhostRiver, the longer it is, the more fun it is! I am passing this, well done. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 00:15, 30 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]