Talk:James S. Rains/GA1

GA Review

Passed. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 19:22, 18 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.

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Reviewer: Lee Vilenski (talk · contribs) 21:18, 16 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Hello, I am planning on reviewing this article for GA Status, over the next couple of days. Thank you for nominating the article for GA status. I hope I will learn some new information, and that my feedback is helpful.

If nominators or editors could refrain from updating the particular section that I am updating until it is complete, I would appreciate it to remove a edit conflict. Please address concerns in the section that has been completed above (If I've raised concerns up to references, feel free to comment on things like the lede.)

I generally provide an overview of things I read through the article on a first glance. Then do a thorough sweep of the article after the feedback is addressed. After this, I will present the pass/failure. I may use strikethrough tags when concerns are met. Even if something is obvious why my concern is met, please leave a message as courtesy.

Best of luck! you can also use the {{done}} tag to state when something is addressed. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)}

Please let me know after the review is done, if you were happy with the review! Obviously this is regarding the article's quality, however, I want to be happy and civil to all, so let me know if I have done a good job, regardless of the article's outcome.

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Lede

Appointed to command of the 8th Division of the MSG in May 1861, and may have - there's something off about this connector. "He may have" might be better. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:28, 18 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]
- I've rephrased this sentence to fix the grammar issues
Otherwise lede looks good. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:28, 18 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

General

Only because it's usually asked about - can we directly cite the date of birth? Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:57, 18 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]
- I've moved a citation to directly after the date of birth, although I doubt it's controversial in this case
His seat represented Newton County - could probably merge this sentence to the one before. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:57, 18 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]
- Done
dated to May 18. - is this an American phrase? Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 19:08, 18 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]
- Yes, it's an Americanism
An effective recruiter, Rains proved to have little military talent - I don't see how these two things are related. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 19:08, 18 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]
- Rephrased sentence
I've had a good look through the rest of the article and I can't see much worth complaining about. Great work. I usually put things on hold, but there isn't enough here to warrant that. If you enjoyed this and want something new to do - I have items at both FAC and GAN for review, but otherwise, congratulations on a great article. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 19:20, 18 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Review meta comments

I'll begin the review as soon as I can! If you fancy returning the favour, I have a list of nominations for review at WP:GAN and WP:FAC, respectively. I'd be very grateful if you were to complete one of these if you get time. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 21:18, 16 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

About tag

Sorry to butt in, but I was just about to review this article, but was beaten to it by Lee Vilenski. Please add an about tag to the top of the article. Thanks. This should alert readers to the fact that James E. Rains was another similarly-named Confederate general. In fact, when I first saw this article I believed it referred to the other General James Rains, who was killed at the Battle of Stones River. Now I will gracefully get out of everyone's way. Djmaschek (talk) 21:43, 16 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

I've added a hatnote and have also converted James Rains into a dab page. Hog Farm _Talk 23:41, 16 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.