Talk:James Morris III/GA1

GA Review

Good article nomination on hold

This article's Good Article promotion has been put on hold. During review, some issues were discovered that can be resolved without a major re-write. This is how the article, as of June 18, 2008, compares against the six good article criteria:

1. Well written?: Minor Fail

A few minor gramatical problems:

On January 3, 1781, Morris was freed as part of a prisoner exchange. - Does the citation say who he was exchanged for, even just a rank?

he received an unsolicited ensign's commission in the Connecticut militia, which he accepted. - If it was unsolicited, why did he receive it?

Specifically, Morris's company of light infantry provided support to the forlorn hope stealth force commanded by Colonel Alexander Hamilton. - From my knowledge of Napoleonic War practices, Folorn Hopes were rarely stealthy formations, considering what they were tasked with doing. 'Stealthy' should be removed.

It is at this point in Morris's life that he accepts that he would never realize his early dream of becoming a minister - Mixture of tenses - should be 'accepted'

2. Factually accurate?: Pass

All areas cited per pre-GA comments made by this reviewer

3. Broad in coverage?: Pass

Passes, considering the lack of material to be found on such a relatively obscure figure.

4. Neutral point of view?: Pass

Passes, no problems

5. Article stability? Pass

Passes, article is stable, no editwars

6. Images?: Pass

No problems here

Please address these matters soon and then leave a note here showing how they have been resolved. After 48 hours the article should be reviewed again. If these issues are not addressed within 7 days, the article may be failed without further notice. Thank you for your work so far. Just fix these points, and the article can be passed to GA status. Skinny87 (talk) 16:50, 18 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Well Written Issues

Prisoner Exchaged: No information available as to whom James Morris was exchanged for.
Unsolicited Commission: "Within a few months, however, he received an unsolicited Ensign's commission in the Connecticut militia which he accepted on the advice of Dr. Bellamy." (Strong 1976, p. 14) only information available.
Forlorn Hope: "I then had the command of the first Company at the head of the column that supported the Forlorn Hope. Not a man was killed in the Forlorn Hope; they were so near the Fort before they were discovered that the Enemy overshot them and the whole firing fell upon the main body." (Keefer 1947, p. 25) I believe this qualifies as stealth, but could be persuaded.

My only real issue is that the way it is worded makes it sound like a tagline from a B-Movie, 'Folorn Hope Stealth Force' starring Chuck Norris! Perhaps omitting stealh force from where they are at present, and adding them at the end of the sentence as a note that it was a success due to its stealthy nature which surprised the British defenders. Solve this, I think, and it can be passed! Skinny87 (talk) 17:27, 18 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

I hadn't considered that image and I think you are right (however, if he is available I do think Chuck Norris would be perfect to play the lead in James Morris: The Movie). As it is somewhat tangential to the topic anyway I simply removed the "stealth force" phrase. Thanks again. --Burnsie510 (talk) 21:24, 18 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Accepts: This has been changed as recommended.

Thanks for taking the time for review. I hope this is satisfactory.--Burnsie510 (talk) 17:20, 18 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Congratulations, this is now a GA-Class article! Skinny87 (talk) 21:53, 18 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]