Talk:Jack jumper ant/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: Dunkleosteus77 (talk · contribs) 22:47, 6 October 2015 (UTC)

Comments by Dunkleosteus77

I've only read up to the Behaviour and ecology section, so I'll be back with more comments.

Thanks for initiating the review. This is the only GA nominee I have managed to not pass, so I will be glad to see this article promoted this time.

Congratulations on promoting yet another article to GA status Dunkleosteus77 ^{(push to talk)} 14:54, 13 October 2015 (UTC)

As always, thank you for initiating the review. It's finally good to see this article reach GA status, a goal I intended for: for almost a year. Burklemore1 (talk) 16:06, 13 October 2015 (UTC)

General comments

• Is this written in Australian English? If so, add the template {{Australian English}} to the article's talk page

Done.

• "The queen, measures..." in the lead, take out the comma

Done.

• "...kill other insects by with injecting venom", in the lead, take out "with"?

Done.

• "...meaning 'covered with hair, especially soft hair' " in the Taxonomy section, take out "especially soft hair"

Done.

• You don't have to say "The species is a member of the genus Myrmecia, a part of the subfamily Myrmeciinae", in the Taxonomy section, in the third paragraph because it already explains it in the first

I have only seen this once.

• "...and less common in urban areas", in the Distribution and habitat section, add the word "are" after "and"

Done.

• You contradict yourself when you say "Jack jumper ants live in open habitats..." and then say "They often reside in damp areas, such as forests..."

Done.

• When you say "open forest", do you mean "dry forest"?

I think they are two different things, unless we can say "dry open forests"?

Eh, done anyway. Dunkleosteus77, just tagging you here because I'm not sure if you have forgotten about this review. Burklemore1 (talk) 04:39, 13 October 2015 (UTC)

Other comments

• Shouldn't Historical treatment be a subheading under Interactions with humans?

Done.

• Is this about a species or species group? If it is a species group, add a table or a list of the species of jack jumper ants in the Taxonomy section.

M. pilosula is a distinct species, the group was named after it.

Final comments

• There are two sections on treatment, try merging those, or merge Historical treatment into History

Done.

• The Prognosis section basically talks about the milder reaction to the stings, try merging it with Signs and symptoms

Done.

• In Historical treatment, I don't think "Indigenous" should be capitalized

Done.

• Add {{Main|Ant venom}} to the Venom section

Done.