Talk:Ivo Herenčić/GA1
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 20:24, 8 September 2021 (UTC)
Comments
- Lead is quite large for a modestly-sized article, suggest you trim it down by around 30%.
- "He returned to... " -> "Herenčić returned to ..."
- "5th Ustaše Corps" in the infobox yet "5th Ustasha Corps" in the lead. In general, you avoid Ustaše in favour of Ustasha yet use plenty of other words with diacritics etc, is there any reason you do this for Ustaše? Oh, perhaps that's only in the lead... I think perhaps a quick check of consistent usage is needed.
- "this wasn't enough" avoid contractions.
- "British 38th (Irish) Infantry Brigade" Infantry doesn't appear to be part of its formal name.
- Ref 13 should be pp.
- And ref 19 too.
- Yeomans year range ref title needs an en-dash.
- Check ISBNs are consistently formatted and all non-English language references have their languages noted.
- Begić and Jelić-Butić also have year ranges which need en-dashes rather than hyphens.
It's an excellent piece of work, not much to grumble about here. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 18:39, 9 September 2021 (UTC)
- @The Rambling Man: I have addressed all points, but I only managed to trim the lead down a little bit. If you have suggestions on how to trim it further or any other comments I'd love to hear them.