Talk:Iveta Mukuchyan/GA2

GA Review

The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.

Article (edit | visual edit | history) · Article talk (edit | history) · Watch

Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 18:40, 23 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

Mukuchyan's debut EP → Mukuchyan's debut extended play (EP)
and obtained wide reception in Armenian media → this is an example of WP:FANCRUFT; I can't find such information in the article's body
Their single initiated another collaboration between them, released in October on iTunes under the name Armenian Folk → Their single preceded a collaborative album, Armenian Folk (2017).
The Path of Our Dream, which premiered on 19 December → The Path of Our Dream in the same year

Infobox

The genres aren't sourced in the article's body

Early life

This seems on point ;)

Career

2009–2014: Hay Superstar and The Voice of Germany

In 2010, Mukuchyan → In 2010, the singer
on the French-language → on the French language
In the same year, in Germany, Mukuchyan participated in a song contest → In the same year, Mukuchyan participated in a German song contest
In 2011, Mukuchyan was featured → In 2011, the singer was featured
gained wide reaction in Armenian media → just because several publications reported its release doesn't mean it gained wide reaction in Armenian media
In 2014, Mukuchyan was featured → In 2014, she was featured
and was again featured on the cover of El Style → you repeat yourself with "featured"

2015−2016: Eurovision Song Contest

Main articles → This should be "See also"
during the Eurovision season → this sounds akward

2016−present: IvaVerse and "Dashterov"

Armenian TV shows → Armenian television shows
Didn't spend much time on this; see "Outcome"

Discography

Dashterov collaboration → You should make a table (like for EPs) called "Collaborative albums", without showing the tracklist
As lead artist > Add a row for peak positions on SWE Heat, as "LoveWave" peaked at number 13 there (take this as an example)
For "De Jpta", the row of names is too heavy; make a break (
) after Anahit Shahbazyan

Filmography

The "!scope="row"" should be on the year
Same for "As herself"

Awards and nominations

You should use the same type of table as here

Outcome

I'm sorry, but the article still has many issues. I can read many clipped and short sentences (an article should read as a story) along with (still) unreliable sources (e.g. Facebook, Instagram...). I think you should take more time off and work extensively with another user on this article. Again, I'm sorry, but the article is still not up there. Best, Cartoon network freak (talk) 09:20, 24 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.