Talk:Italian ironclad Principe di Carignano/GA1
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Reviewer: Zawed (talk · contribs) 04:17, 28 February 2016 (UTC)
I will review this one. Comments to follow. Zawed (talk) 04:17, 28 February 2016 (UTC)
Lead
- Repeated use of "...she was..."
- Changed the one in the middle - see if that's better.
- The link to Vacca in the lead is to a different individual with the same name. The name is a redlink later in the article.
- Created a stub on the right guy, though it needs a fair bit of work.
- "...;the leading squadron of the Italian fleet...": I'm struggling with the phrasing here as there is no context for how the squadron relates to the ship.
- I figured it was clear that the ship was part of the leading squadron, since it previously says she was the first ship in the line.
Design/Infobox
- Length is given as 72.98m in text, 72.89m in the infobox.
- Good catch, .98 is correct.
- Short/Long tons conversion missing in the infobox for normal displacement.
- Unless I'm missing something, normal displacement is in the infobox.
- The link to propulsion is referred to as plural in the infobox but ship only has one engine.
- Fixed
- Inconsistency in number of boilers.
- Fixed
Service history
- "...on June 27, in attempt to..." > "...on June 27, in an attempt to..."
- Good catch
- link Adriatic.
- Done
- Dupelinks: Austrian Navy, Affondatore, coastal defense ship, Pola, and turret ships are all linked twice.
- Fixed
- "...enter the harbor Vis..." > "...enter Vis' harbor..."?
- Fixed
- "They there thus..." > "They were thus..."
- Sometimes I wonder why my fingers type what they do.
Later career
- "Italia-classs" > "Italia-classes"?
- Fixed
References
- Can an OCLC number be found for Wilson?
- Added.
Overall, this article reads well, is fully cited and neutral in tone, and has reasonable coverage of the subject. The tags on the images appear appropriate. I will check back on progress in a few days. Cheers. Zawed (talk) 04:53, 28 February 2016 (UTC)
- Thanks for another review, Zawed. Parsecboy (talk) 13:23, 1 March 2016 (UTC)
- Looks good, passing as a GA. Good work. Zawed (talk) 05:38, 3 March 2016 (UTC)