Talk:Iso Rae/GA1

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Reviewer: Casliber (talk · contribs) 03:57, 28 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Right then......let's see.....

~~If there was a way that we could not start the second sentence in the lead with "Rae..." it'd be good as we're repeating her name from sentence one, but "She..." looks a bit odd there I concede...~~

Reworked. hamiltonstone (talk) 12:33, 28 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]

as an aside, should Etaples art colony be at Étaples art colony? If not, then we need a redirect....

One would think so but, for whatever reason - possibly including the inability of art galleries to find how to type an "É" in html - it seems quite common for reliable sources to not use the acute, so i think it can stay. hamiltonstone (talk) 12:33, 28 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]

"~~longest-term residents"- an apt description but odd construction of words - be nice if we could come up with another way of wording it....can't think of one~~

Since she wasn't the longest term, i decided not to make a thing of it, so it now simply reads "Rae became a long-term resident at the Étaples colony"hamiltonstone (talk) 13:33, 28 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]

~~any significant works that can be discussed would be a big plus - seems odd to have an article on an artist and not have any works discussed~~

Have addressed this via the war works - which i discovered are public domain! hooray! hamiltonstone (talk) 13:28, 28 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]

~~another artist that died in a mental hospital - wow. Any extra info here would be good....but hard to find I wager.~~

Nothing in what i have read to date, and i've gone back over everything i think. Not something people tend to record except in full-length bios - and there isn't one of her. hamiltonstone (talk) 13:28, 28 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Yeah, thought that might be the case....my other thought was getting a death cert....but seems a bit extreme and more for genealogy than wikipedia...Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 14:30, 28 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]

~~A location for Musée du Touquet would be good to give it context.~~

Done. hamiltonstone (talk) 12:33, 28 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]

~~this source mentions the 75 works being bought by the AWM - would be good to add.~~

75 in Oz - 11 by the AWM - yes, i must have been lazy and didn't make full use of that article. I hope I've corrected that now. hamiltonstone (talk) 13:28, 28 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]

~~The war material is fascinating, as are the pastels - if we can get any more of this sort of info into the article that'd be good.~~

Have added more detail from that article. hamiltonstone (talk) 13:28, 28 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Nice read overall. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 04:06, 28 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, no copyvios, spelling and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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