Talk:Isle of the Dead (video game)/GA2

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Reviewer: Vaticidalprophet (talk · contribs) 08:52, 17 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Picking this up. Vaticidalprophet 08:52, 17 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Opening notes:

The lead is relatively short, as is the article in general. Some of the sources seem underutilized, such as the Rock Paper Shotgun review, the Dragon review, and the "Weekly Kusoge" (fantastic name) Hardcore Gaming 101 piece.
The prose needs some work -- there are some typos (e.g. "Cobbett" for "Corbett"), a lot of fairly choppy/repetitive sentences, and some circumlocutory phrasing (e.g. Corbett would later call it one of the weirdest shooters of the 1990s -- WP:INTOTHEWOULDS).

The article is currently 738 words long according to WP:PROSESIZE. I think you probably have at least a hundred or so more words of material in some of the sources about its gameplay and reception, as well as in expanding the lead paragraphs; both are fairly sparse with rather short, prosaic sentences. That said, this is a good start, and it'll be able to pass with some work. I'm not drilling into the nitty-gritty details yet, though I plan to later. Vaticidalprophet 22:54, 18 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

I expanded the lead a bit and got people to copyedit the page. Honestly there isn't much about the game to work with to really add more material for the page, in my opinion. GamerPro64 23:30, 20 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

The prose is definitely looking better now. The narrow scope itself isn't a problem -- short articles can definitely be GAs, it's just a matter of making sure they're in-depth. I have a query about the sentence Despite gameplay being compared to Wolfenstein 3D, Isle of the Dead received negative reviews upon release.[1][4][3] -- aside from the refs being in non-numerical order, the positioning here seems to be a slightly awkward juxtaposition. It'd be worth just noting "mostly negative reviews", and bringing up the specific Wolfenstein comparisons later in the paragraph attributed to the people who made them. Vaticidalprophet 00:19, 25 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Reworked that part and moved it around. GamerPro64 05:21, 25 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Vaticidalprophet is there anything else? GamerPro64 04:52, 28 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

After some consideration, I'm happy to pass this. Vaticidalprophet 04:53, 28 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]