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Hillraym stated in his/her edit summary when re-creating this page: "I was in the process of changing content to assert the significance of this topic." User also placed a {{hangon}} tag on the page (I've corrected it). Let's give this a few hours to see if the article improves. — KieferSkunk (talk) — 23:42, 12 November 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Edit request

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Moved from User talk:IWCommunications
 –  Spintendo  01:17, 4 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Here are six issues I’m hoping you can help me with:

Problem #1: Current: IslandWood is a non-profit outdoor learning center located on Bainbridge Island in Washington. Why This Needs to be Revised: We are an organization (not a center) with programs and offices in Seattle, Woodinville, and Bainbridge Island, WA. We have a campus on Bainbridge Island but serve about twice as many students in our other locations as we do on Bainbridge. Citation: [1]. Also we do not just do “outdoor learning.” We have classroom curriculum [2] as well and teacher preparation programs [3]. The term “environmental education” is more accurate in describing what we do. Proposed revision: IslandWood is a non-profit environmental education organization with programs on Bainbridge Island, Seattle, and Woodinville in Washington.

Problem #2: Current: It was founded in 2001 to provide environmental education for young people living in King and Kitsap Counties. Why This Needs to be Revised: We were founded in 2000 and started programs in 2002. We never just served Kitsap and King County, but also schools in Snohomish, Pierce, Mason, Thurston counties – basically most of the Puget Sound region. Citation: [4] Also, we were founded to increase access to these types of learning opportunities for kids in this region. That should be included. Our work has expanded since then to include other things, but that was why we were initially founded so for accuracy should be mentioned. Proposed revision: It was founded in 2000 to increase access to outdoor experiential learning opportunities for young people living in the Puget Sound area.

Problem #3: Current: In 2010, IslandWood and Homewaters joined forces, giving IslandWood a key component in urban environmental education. In 2012, IslandWood was selected to lead the education programs at Brightwater Treatment Plant[1] in Woodinville, WA. Why This Needs to be Revised: This information belongs in the history section. The Homewaters brand name hasn’t existed for years and it is irrelevant to the description of what IslandWood is now (and also confusing for people who want to know about what we do). Also, IslandWood’s first contract with King County’s Brightwater treatment plant was signed in 2011 NOT 2012. Proposed revision: Move to history section and correct date of Brightwater deal from 2012 to 2011.

Problem #4: Current: IslandWood's core program on Bainbridge Island is called the School Overnight Program. Approximately 4000 fourth, fifth and sixth grade students attend the program each year.[2]They are taught by residential graduate students taking part in the Graduate Residency in Education, Environment and Community (EEC),[3] which is offered in partnership with the University of Washington. Why This Needs to be Revised: This was true in 2010, it’s not true anymore. Today we serve nearly twice as many students in our school programs in Seattle and Woodinville (about 7,000) [5] as we do on Bainbridge Island in our School Overnight Program (about 4,400) [6]. Those programs in Seattle and Woodinville are now as “core” as our School Overnight Program. Also, while our graduate students do teach in the School Overnight Program, they don’t do so exclusively (we have staff instructors as well). This also doesn’t mention our teacher professional development programs and workshops which have become an important, and state funded, part of our work. Also the name of our graduate program is incorrect - should be Graduate Program in Education for Environment and Community [7]. Proposed revision: IslandWood offers several school programs for 3rd-8th graders including the four-day School Overnight Program on its campus on Bainbridge Island, day programs at the Brightwater Wastewater Treatment Center in Woodinville and in Seattle watersheds, and a 4th grade stormwater science and engineering unit. IslandWood also runs the Graduate Program in Education for Environment and Community (EEC),[3] which is offered in partnership with the University of Washington College of Education, and delivers teacher professional development programs and workshops.

Problem #5: Current: In 2016, IslandWood partnered with Antioch University to launch the Urban Environmental Education Program. Why This Needs to be Revised: We are no longer involved in this program and that link is dead. And the date is wrong -- should say 2014. Also, we partnered with Antioch University Seattle NOT Antioch University. While Antioch University is the parent brand, it is not the same organization. Proposed revision: Move this to the history section with the following changes: “In 2014, IslandWood partnered with Antioch University Seattle (AUS) to launch the Urban Environmental Education Program. In 2019, IslandWood and AUS ended their partnership and AUS took over the program.”

Problem #6: Current: IslandWood also offers the campus to other organizations to host conferences, meetings, retreats or celebrations, including weddings. Conferences and weddings at IslandWood help to sustain the mission by providing funds for the School Overnight Program.[citation needed] Why This Needs to be Revised: For clarity and to mention other programs we offer. For example, our free and low cost public events and programs attract around 7,000 people every year yet there’s no mention of that in this description. Funds from our events business help cover both scholarships and expenses to run all of our education programs not just the School Overnight Program. Proposed revision: IslandWood also offers summer camps, public events and programs, and hosts meetings, retreats, celebrations, and weddings on its campus. Revenue from its events business helps sustain the mission by providing funds for student scholarships and educational programming.[citation needed] (If you need a citation, our annual report may work where it shows how events contribute to our operating costs: [8])

Thank you for anything you can do to help us update the description of our organization. As a nonprofit our Wikipedia description is an important tool for helping people understand what we do and get involved in our work. While I understand the need to avoid promotional sounding language, at a minimum we need our description to be accurate and appreciate anything you can do to help with these corrections and clarifications.}}IWCommunications (talk) 21:53, 3 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

References

  1. ^ https://islandwood.org/about-us/
  2. ^ https://islandwood.org/community-waters-science-unit/
  3. ^ https://islandwood.org/teacher-professional-development/
  4. ^ https://islandwood.org/about-us/our-journey/
  5. ^ https://islandwood.org/day-programs-in-seattle-and-at-brightwater/
  6. ^ https://islandwood.org/school-overnight-program/
  7. ^ https://islandwood.org/graduate-program/
  8. ^ https://islandwood.org/about-us/about-annual-reports/

I'm including two subsequent posts made by another editor on the COI editor's talk page below since they are relevant to the edit request above:

Please bear in mind that all content must be cited from reliable sources that are unconnected with the subject and have a reputation for fact checking.  Dlohcierekim 22:36, 3 July 2019 (UTC)

and:

Oh, we generally don't care what subjects say about themselves. I see the ref list at the bottom. It's all sourced to the subject. Anyway, that edit request can be made after unblocking. Dlohcierekim 22:38, 3 July 2019 (UTC)

In light of Dlohcierekim's feedback, I'm setting the template to |ans=yes. To the COI editor: When this block is resolved and you're ready to proceed with your request, please change the {{request edit}} template's answer parameter to read from |ans=yes to |ans=no. Thank you!
Regards,  Spintendo  03:50, 4 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

I've boldly reset the thing to "nO" as the thing is on the talk page now and I don't want to be a kill joy have the last word in case someone/anyone disagrees.  Dlohcierekim (talk) 04:00, 4 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Reply 04-JUN-2019

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  • Your edit request could not be reviewed because the provided references are not formatted correctly.[a] The citation style predominantly used by the IslandWood article is Citation Style 1 (CS1). The citation style used in the edit request consists of bare URL's.[b] Any requested edit of yours which may be implemented will need to resemble the current style already in use in the article – in this case, CS1. (See WP:CITEVAR.) As Wikipedia is a volunteer project, edit requests such yours are generally expected to have this formatting done before the request is submitted for review. In the extended section below titled Citation style, I have illustrated two examples: one showing how the edit request was submitted, and another showing how requests should be submitted in the future:
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In the example above there are three URL's provided with the claim statements, but these URL's have not been placed using Citation Style 1, which is the style predominantly used by the IslandWood article. Using this style the WikiFormatted text should resemble the following:

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The Sun's diameter is 864,337 miles,<ref>{{cite book|last1=Sjöblad|first1=Tristan|title=The Sun|url=http://www.booksource.com|publisher=Academic Press|date=2019|page=1}}</ref> while the Moon's diameter is 2,159 miles.<ref>{{cite journal|last1=Harinath|first1=Paramjit|title=Size of the Moon|journal=Science|issue=78|volume=51|url=http://www.journalsource.com|date=2019|page=46}}</ref> The Sun's temperature is 5,778 degrees Kelvin.<ref>{{cite web|last1=Uemura|first1=Shu|title=The Sun's Heat|url=http://www.websource.com|publisher=Academic Press|date=2019|page=2}}</ref>

Displays as:

The Sun's diameter is 864,337 miles,[1] while the Moon's diameter is 2,159 miles.[2] The Sun's temperature is 5,778 degrees Kelvin.[3]

References

  1. ^ Sjöblad, Tristan. The Sun. Academic Press, 2019, p. 1.
  2. ^ Harinath, Paramjit. (2019). "Size of the Moon", Science, 51(78):46.
  3. ^ Uemura, Shū. The Sun's Heat. Academic Press, 2019, p. 2.

In the example above the references have been formatted according to Citation Style 1, which shows the author, the source's name, date, etc., all information which is lost when only the links are provided. As Wikipedia is a volunteer project, edit requests such yours are generally expected to have this formatting done before the request is submitted for review.

  • Kindly rewrite your edit request so that it aligns more with the second example shown in the collapsed section above, and feel free to re-submit that edit request at your earliest convenience. If you have any questions about this formatting please don't hesitate to ask myself or another editor. Regards,  Spintendo  05:38, 4 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

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  1. ^ The fault for this formatting error may have originated with the automated prompts used by the edit request template, which asks for a COI editor to "supply the URL of any references used". While the resulting omission of information would not be the fault of the requesting COI editor, it nevertheless remains their responsibility to supply the references formatted in the style used by the article.
  2. ^ The use of bare URLs as references is a style which is acceptable for use in Wikipedia. However, general practice dictates that the style already in use for an article be the one that is subsequently used for all future additions unless changed by editorial consensus.[1]

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  1. ^ "WP:CITEVAR - Wikipedia:Citing sources". Wikipedia. 20 October 2018. Retrieved 22 October 2018. Guideline: It is normal practice to defer to the style used by the first major contributor or adopted by the consensus of editors already working on the page, unless a change in consensus has been achieved. If the article you are editing is already using a particular citation style, you should follow it.

Some proposed changes

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Extended content

Problem #1: Current: IslandWood is a non-profit outdoor learning center located on Bainbridge Island in Washington. Why This Needs to be Revised: IslandWood is an organization (not a center) with programs and offices in Seattle, Woodinville, and Bainbridge Island, WA. The organization has a campus on Bainbridge Island but serves about twice as many students in their other locations as they do on Bainbridge. Citation: [1]. Also IslandWood does not just do “outdoor learning.” They have classroom curriculum [2] as well and teacher preparation programs [3]. The term “environmental education” is more accurate in describing what they do. Proposed revision: IslandWood is a non-profit environmental education [1] organization with programs on Bainbridge Island, Seattle[2], and Woodinville [3] in Washington.

Problem #2: Current: It was founded in 2001 to provide environmental education for young people living in King and Kitsap Counties. Why This Needs to be Revised: IslandWood was founded in 2000 and started programs in 2002. The organization never just served Kitsap and King County, but also schools in Snohomish, Pierce, Mason, Thurston counties – basically most of the Puget Sound region. Citation: [4] Also, IslandWood was founded to increase access to these types of learning opportunities for kids in this region. That should be included. The organization’s work has expanded since then to include other things, but that was why they were initially founded so for accuracy should be mentioned. Proposed revision: It was founded in 2000 [4] to increase access to outdoor experiential learning opportunities for young people living in the Puget Sound area.

Problem #3: Current: In 2010, IslandWood and Homewaters joined forces, giving IslandWood a key component in urban environmental education. In 2012, IslandWood was selected to lead the education programs at Brightwater Treatment Plant[1] in Woodinville, WA. Why This Needs to be Revised: This information belongs in the history section. The Homewaters brand name hasn’t existed for years and it is irrelevant to the description of what IslandWood is now (and also confusing for people who want to know about what the organization does). Also, IslandWood’s first contract with King County’s Brightwater treatment plant was signed in 2011 NOT 2012. Proposed revision: Move to history section and correct date of Brightwater deal from 2012 to 2011. [5] [6]

Problem #4: Current: IslandWood's core program on Bainbridge Island is called the School Overnight Program. Approximately 4000 fourth, fifth and sixth grade students attend the program each year.[2]They are taught by residential graduate students taking part in the Graduate Residency in Education, Environment and Community (EEC),[3] which is offered in partnership with the University of Washington. Why This Needs to be Revised: This was true in 2010; it’s not true anymore. Today, IslandWood serves nearly twice as many students in its school programs in Seattle and Woodinville (about 7,000) [5] as they do on Bainbridge Island in the School Overnight Program (about 4,400) [6]. Those programs in Seattle and Woodinville are now as “core” as the School Overnight Program. Also, while IslandWood’s graduate students do teach in the School Overnight Program, they don’t do so exclusively (IslandWood has staff instructors as well). This also doesn’t mention IslandWood’s teacher professional development programs and workshops which have become an important, and state funded, part of the organization’s work. Also the name of the graduate program is incorrect - it should be Graduate Program in Education for Environment and Community [7]. Proposed revision: IslandWood offers several school programs for 3rd-8th graders, including the four-day School Overnight Program on its campus on Bainbridge Island [7], day programs at the Brightwater Wastewater Treatment Center in Woodinville and in Seattle watersheds [8], and a 4th grade stormwater science and engineering unit [9]. IslandWood also runs the Graduate Program in Education for Environment and Community (EEC) [10], which is offered in partnership with the University of Washington College of Education, and delivers teacher professional development programs and workshops [11].

Problem #5: Current: In 2016, IslandWood partnered with Antioch University to launch the Urban Environmental Education Program. Why This Needs to be Revised: IslandWood is no longer involved in this program and that link is dead. And the date is wrong -- should say 2014. Also, IslandWood partnered with Antioch University Seattle NOT Antioch University. While Antioch University is the parent brand, it is not the same organization. Proposed revision: Move this to the history section with the following changes: “In 2014, IslandWood partnered with Antioch University Seattle (AUS) to launch the Urban Environmental Education Program. [12] In 2019, IslandWood and AUS ended their partnership and AUS took over the program. [13]

Problem #6: Current: IslandWood also offers the campus to other organizations to host conferences, meetings, retreats or celebrations, including weddings. Conferences and weddings at IslandWood help to sustain the mission by providing funds for the School Overnight Program.[citation needed] Why This Needs to be Revised: For clarity and to mention other programs that IslandWood offers. For example, IslandWood’s free and low cost public events and programs attract around 7,000 people every year, yet there’s no mention of that in this description. Funds from IslandWood’s events business help cover both scholarships and expenses to run all of the organization’s education programs, not just the School Overnight Program. Proposed revision: IslandWood also offers summer campshttps://www.parentmap.com/article/fun-summer-camps-for-seattle-area-kids, [14] public events and programs[15], and hosts meetings, retreats, celebrations, and weddings [16] on its campus. Revenue from its events business helps sustain the mission by providing funds for student scholarships and educational programming. [17] New Addition: The buildings on its Bainbridge Island campus are LEED Gold certified and were the first project in Washington to receive the LEED rating. [18]

References

  1. ^ EPA. "What is Environmental Education?".
  2. ^ Sewell, Lauren (2018). "Partner Spotlight: IslandWood". City Habitats. {{cite web}}: Cite has empty unknown parameter: |1= (help)
  3. ^ King County. "Brightwater Center".
  4. ^ Cook, Guzauskas (2012). "E-PARCC Collaborative Governance Initiative Case Study". {{cite web}}: Missing or empty |url= (help); Unknown parameter |= ignored (help)
  5. ^ King County (Nov. 3, 2011). "News archive Sammamish Watershed". {{cite web}}: Check date values in: |date= (help); Missing or empty |url= (help); Unknown parameter |= ignored (help)
  6. ^ Kolb-Nelson, Annie (November 8, 2011). "Brightwater Partners with IslandWood". The Woodinville Weekly. {{cite web}}: Cite has empty unknown parameter: |1= (help)
  7. ^ Ross, Tracy (2016). "The IslandWood of Outdoor Enlightenment". Mountain. {{cite web}}: Cite has empty unknown parameter: |1= (help)
  8. ^ King County. "Elementary and middle school programs".
  9. ^ Next Generation Science Standards. "Grade 4: Community Waters".
  10. ^ University of Washington College of Education. "IslandWood Residency".
  11. ^ Goerz, Thelonious (May 28, 2019). "In Washington state, classrooms are putting climate change at the forefront of K-12 education". The Daily. {{cite web}}: Unknown parameter |paragraph= ignored (help)
  12. ^ Thomashow, Cindy (June 7, 2018). "The Diverse Voices of Future Urban Environmental Educators". The Nature of Cities. {{cite web}}: Cite has empty unknown parameter: |1= (help)
  13. ^ Antioch University Seattle. "MA in Education with Urban Environmental Education".
  14. ^ Chaney, Nancy (March 26, 2018). "40+ Fun Summer Camps for Kids in the Seattle Area for 2018". Parent Map.
  15. ^ Murray, Elisa (March 20, 2019). "Weekend getaways: Bainbridge Island makes a ferry good escape plan for families". Seattle Times.
  16. ^ Burch, Kelly (May 3, 2017). "Take Your Wedding to Camp! These Nature Preserves & Summer Camps Double as Wedding Venues". Brides.
  17. ^ Cook, Guzauskas (2012). "E-PARCC Collaborative Governance Initiative Case Study". p. 5. {{cite web}}: Missing or empty |url= (help); Unknown parameter |= ignored (help)
  18. ^ Dietrich, Heidi (December 1, 2002). "IslandWood among five to receive top award from the Green Building Council". {{cite web}}: Missing or empty |url= (help); Unknown parameter |= ignored (help)

Hhupp (talk) 17:49, 7 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Reply 7-AUG-2019

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Regards,  Spintendo  19:40, 7 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Proposal review 7-AUG-2019

IslandWood is a non-profit environmental education organization with programs on Bainbridge Island, Seattle, and Woodinville in Washington.
 Approved.Cite error: There are <ref> tags on this page without content in them (see the help page).


It was founded in 2000 to increase access to outdoor experiential learning opportunities for young people living in the Puget Sound area.
 Partly-approved.[note 1]


In 2010, IslandWood and Homewaters joined forces, giving IslandWood a key component in urban environmental education.
no Declined.[note 2]


In 2011, IslandWood was selected to lead the education programs at Brightwater Treatment Plant in Woodinville, WA.
 Approved.Cite error: There are <ref> tags on this page without content in them (see the help page).


IslandWood offers several school programs for 3rd-8th graders, including the four-day School Overnight Program on its campus on Bainbridge Island, day programs at the Brightwater Wastewater Treatment Center in Woodinville and in Seattle watersheds, and a 4th grade stormwater science and engineering unit.
Clarification needed.[note 3]


IslandWood also runs the Graduate Program in Education for Environment and Community (EEC), which is offered in partnership with the University of Washington College of Education.
 Approved.Cite error: There are <ref> tags on this page without content in them (see the help page).


and delivers teacher professional development programs and workshops.
no Declined.[note 4]


In 2014, IslandWood partnered with Antioch University Seattle (AUS) to launch the Urban Environmental Education Program. In 2019, IslandWood and AUS ended their partnership and AUS took over the program.
 Approved.Cite error: There are <ref> tags on this page without content in them (see the help page).


IslandWood also offers summer camps, public events and programs, and hosts meetings, retreats, celebrations, and weddings on its campus. Revenue from its events business helps sustain the mission by providing funds for student scholarships and educational programming.
no Declined.[note 5]


The buildings on its Bainbridge Island campus are LEED Gold certified and were the first project in Washington to receive the LEED rating.
 Unable to implement.[note 6]


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  1. ^ The added text was revised to include only the date, and was placed under the History section.
  2. ^ Firstly, it is not clear what Homewaters is. Secondly, the phrase "giving IslandWood a key component in urban environmental education" is vague and promotional, not to mention being worded using Wikipedia's voice, which should not be done.
  3. ^ Please provide references for these claims from reliable, secondary sources unconnected to the subject university. See WP:SECONDARY.
  4. ^ This claim is vague, in that it does not describe the individual "professional development programs and workshops".
  5. ^ It is not the purpose of Wikipedia to list or describe the non-curricular use of the University's facilities.
  6. ^ This portion of your request could not be implemented because the term LEED Gold certified is not explained nor Wikilinked in the proposed text.
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