Talk:Ishe Komborera Africa/GA1

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 19:09, 17 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]

The lead should be expanded in order to summarise the article, particularly the second paragraph
The first reference in the lead makes no mention of "God Bless Africa" or "God Bless Zimbabwe"
"and then again four days later closure of the first meeting of the Bantu National Congress" - error. and again four days after the closure?
"Initially despite that connotation" - I'd remove "initially"
"One of their considerations was to ban performance of "Ishe Komborera Africa" in African schools and public performance of it often made people liable for arrest" - as it often
"such as; Tanzania used "Mungu ibariki Afrika", Zambia used "Stand and Sing of Zambia, Proud and Free" (to the same tune) and Transkei who used "Nkosi Sikielel' 'Afrika"" - reads a bit odd. I would remove "such as" and just begin the sentence with Tanzania
"The act also made it a criminal offense" - offence
"In 2004, at the 2004 Africa Cup of Nations in Tunisia" - 2004 is already mentioned so remove "In 2004"
No dead links
No dab links

I found a few errors, but once they're clarified this should pass. JAGUAR 21:04, 17 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Jaguar: I have fixed the errors that you raised here. The C of E God Save the Queen! (talk) 09:17, 18 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks! Promoted

JAGUAR 11:04, 18 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]