Talk:Iris López

I wanted to note that Lopez's birth date does not seem to be online, so I cannot list that information. Also, does anyone have suggestions regarding my "lead"/opening segment? I'm not sure how much I should have/if there is anything more I should include there. Isabelhb (talk) 15:36, 27 February 2017 (UTC)Isabel Bonhomme

Has she won any awards? Or perhaps you could note her work with activist organizations (she may be profiled on their websites)?Christacraven (talk) 10:54, 28 February 2017 (UTC)

Peer Review

1. I like the lead, it provides good information on Lopez in a clear way. If someone was to read only the lead, they would know who Lopez is and what work she does. I also like how you have all the sections clearly labelled, so that someone can find what they need or are interested in quickly. 2. As far as changes go, I would add more to the lead so that the large points of each section are encompassed within it and people know what all is covered in the article. For example, say that she has a MA or PhD in Anthropology and/or that she attended Columbia University. I might also link words like "anthropologist", "sociologist", "sterilization", "ethnography" and other words in the lead so that those who are not clear on those topics or areas of study can easily find that information. 3. I think the biggest improvement could be adding more encompassing information from all sections into the lead so that it is a good summary of the article. I like your article! Mtjames20 (talk) 21:01, 7 March 2017 (UTC)

Thanks for the feedback, Miranda! I agree with you that adding to the lead may be beneficial, especially now that all my sections are mostly complete and labeled. I can just go through each section and add a sentence about each into the lead. I will also go ahead and link more words in the lead, that is a helpful idea! Isabelhb (talk) 14:21, 28 March 2017 (UTC)

I think for the intro you should briefly talk about where she went to school which might help strengthen it. Grammatically, watch for repeating phrases. For example, in the "Higher Education" section your say "she then" at the beginning of two sentences. Also, I wonder if there would be a way to combine all the sentences in the "Publications" section. Visually I think it would look better than having all those single sentences. Besides these small changes I think your article is very good! I get a good picture of who she is. I think you have a good amount of sources as well. Belugawhale13 (talk) 03:36, 9 March 2017 (UTC)

Hi! I agree that it would be helpful to add Lopez's education into the lead, as both you and Miranda have mentioned. I was thinking about the best lay out for the publications- should I list them or put them in a paragraph format...I will definitely take your idea into consideration, thank you for your review! Isabelhb (talk) 14:21, 28 March 2017 (UTC)

Peer Review 2

Firstly, I agree with Miranda, I think your information is solid. Everything is very clearly laid out which is really nice and makes it easy to read. I also recommend hyperlinking as many words as possible. It just makes the article easier to navigate. My only suggestion (and I think this goes to say because of how early we are in this process) would be to flesh out your sections so they flow really well. Hopefully there is enough information out there to do that, but I think you're off to a great start! Estewart97 (talk) 03:17, 9 March 2017 (UTC)

Hi Emery! I will definitely link more words, as that seems to be a critique all three of you have mentioned. I will also continue working on the overall layout in order to improve flow and ease of navigation/understanding! Thank you for the review! Isabelhb (talk) 14:23, 28 March 2017 (UTC)